Jefferson Carter

Rookie (February 21,1943)

Writing in the Shower


I wanted something
Eastern European, you know,
something portentous
in the best sense of the word,
but what I managed was
two lines of Southwestern
animal husbandry, half
a simile comparing
something wet to a teaser
stallion on a stud farm
& I was too busy
to mention the sow bugs
in the shower stall,
which echoed like a school
for famous readers.

Submitted: Tuesday, April 18, 2006
Edited: Monday, June 26, 2006

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  • Rookie - 69 Points Sathyanarayana M V S (11/16/2009 10:56:00 AM)

    I wish someone tells me what this is all about? At least Mr.Carter! ! ! ! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Chitra - (6/4/2009 5:37:00 AM)

    I enjoyed reading this poem, a shower of fine words (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Mel Vincent Basconcillo (4/28/2009 4:49:00 AM)

    your lines here are truly awe inspiring! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Brittany graviet (10/11/2008 1:10:00 AM)

    nicely written, goes off then draws the reder in with a poetic meaningful line then continues the pattern. over all letting the reader think and muddle through the lines and message. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 0 Points Chuck Audette (8/15/2008 1:55:00 PM)

    your poetic lines set down here and there, weaving a spiderweb of images in the corner of your shower stall. wonderful - -chuck (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 3 Points Sulaiman Mohd Yusof (5/4/2008 11:23:00 PM)

    the endeavour of writing finally closing the curtains with a big bang........marvellous write JC. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie John Kay (9/30/2007 5:23:00 AM)

    Jefferson,

    The 'sow bugs' echoed with 'bed bugs' in a Moscow flophouse, so you bridged the gap. And the showers in the East are most memorable. Five star poem. John (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Ana Monnar (8/28/2007 8:23:00 PM)

    I smiled from reading the title to the end of the poem. Great write! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Elysabeth Faslund (6/30/2007 3:25:00 PM)

    This is funny...sow bugs in the shower, readers. This is so abstract...to me, anyway...Eastern European to Southwestern U.S. I have to go back and reread this...maybe in the shower stall right above my head...uh, the shower head is above my...oh skip it! xxElysabeth (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Ted Sheridan (5/23/2007 8:07:00 AM)

    Many good writes have come from the shower....and probably an equal number or more of bad ones too. I wish you would post some more as I have read all of these...go take another shower.LOL (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Dee Daffodil (3/8/2007 11:11:00 PM)

    I do most of my writing in the shower....well...composing really....cuz otherwise...the paper gets pretty soggy!
    hugs,
    Dee (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Goldy Locks (10/28/2006 9:25:00 AM)

    this starts right in on your thoughts without any hesitation. like a shower evokes a stream
    of unpredicted notions. makes it exciting to read.

    hearts, Goldy. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Anna Russell (9/12/2006 4:05:00 PM)

    I enjoyed reading this - very well written with a dark, snappy wit.
    Hugs
    Anna xxx (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Tara very irritated with PH injustice (7/11/2006 9:02:00 AM)

    Portentous in the BEST sense of the word is what you are. And everyone knows it even if they're too jealous to say so. t x (Report) Reply

  • Rookie ... ... (4/18/2006 7:44:00 PM)

    i think this is much better than the poem you posted last week, this reminds of you back nearer your best - (your best by the way for me of what i've seen is the image of the salesmen hanging from the wires) - it feels easier, less forced. so you have had writer's block for a while, well what better way out of it than writing a poem about the process of writing a poem. this poses an interesting thought about what kind of poet we can be, pound fancied himself as a chinese poet at times, but is such a thing truly possible, and is attempting it fighting the inevitable? (Report) Reply

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