Baby Poem by hazem al jaber

Baby

Rating: 4.6


I asked you, if you liked me, you said no.
i asked you if i was pretty, you said no.
i asked if i was in your heart, u said no.
i asked if you would cry if i walked away, you said no.
so i walked away,
but......
you grabbed my arm and said...
i don't like you, i love you!
you are not pretty, you are beautiful!
you are not in my heart, you ARE my heart.! !
And i wouldn't cry if you walked away, i would die!

By hazem02

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Louise Mcvicar 15 November 2005

It's very good, but it does sound familiar to something else I heard. But it is nice just the same. Which ones did you write and which ones didnt u?

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Sallie Howson 20 November 2005

i'ts absolutely brilliant..but i agree with louise..it sounds familiar..but maybe its just based on liz lochhead's ' I wouldn't thank you for a valentine ' poem..in which case u did well

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Angelique' Rockwell 30 November 2005

very sweet.....but why ask the questions? these are things people should tell us anyway without being asked - especially those that supposedly care about us. if more people spoke their minds than there wouldn't be so much insecurity. but that would make things to easy, the poem was very touching and very realistic.

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Charley60 K 18 December 2005

Now that is very nice-I was holding my breath, because you needed to hear that and nothing hurtful. well written.......I liked that writing.

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Solitary Soul 09 March 2007

It is not a poem...I mean I heard the same in different languages and in different ways, poems, prose and just like random thoughts.

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Julian Kukunda 28 February 2007

I had started feeling sorry for you at the beginning of the poem i must say you had me on that. Otherwise it is real nice

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Kimberley logan 10 December 2006

Agreed! your poems always have me smiling.Keep up the great job. ._.

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Susan Fletcher 15 June 2006

once again, very nice. tho i ve heard somethin like it before, u r the only one who can put it this way. keep on writing! -suze

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Nibedita Deb 29 December 2005

Wonderful. Love has the prettiest outfit in the ink of your pen. Regards, Nibedita.

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