Treasure Island

David DeSantis

(01/29/85 / Utica, NY)

***7: 43 A.M.


Oh its uninspiring
these blues are like fire.

And I am uninspired
still falling further.

at 24 without passion
lost without a word
like a voice wrapped
in cellophane
muted at the chord.

Vocally forgotten
intangibely indirect
I'm shuffling without meaning
and falling deeper yet.

Still within the motions
still within my time
but unable to grasp
an inch
of a string on a tethered wire.


David DeSantis

Submitted: Monday, March 23, 2009
Edited: Monday, March 23, 2009

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  • Onelia Avelar (4/9/2009 4:42:00 AM)

    '...at 24 without passion' 24 hours a day? The presence of numbers in a poem always disturbs me, probably there is some 'alarming' effect, starting with the title...7: 43 A.M. and this is the point - the poem is actually alarming, thought provoking...well done! (Report) Reply

  • Teresa Dearing (4/4/2009 7:14:00 PM)

    Wake up, same routine, boring all day long, uninspiring... but life has a way of sendings little hiccups to break up the blues...some we live to regret, others a pleasant suprise. Well written I can feel your frustration and boredom. T (Report) Reply

  • Original Unknown Girl (4/1/2009 7:46:00 AM)

    Sometimes its in the morning-time when all alone that one can feel despair. This poem conveys this, I don't think you will be feeling uninspired for long though David. Keep smiling in the face of adversity. HG: -) xx (Report) Reply

  • Anita Atina (3/27/2009 1:44:00 PM)

    The inspiration creeps back in quietly while we're looking elsewhere and writing poetry about it. Cheers Anita (Report) Reply

  • Stephen Stirk (3/23/2009 7:39:00 AM)

    You may be uninspired, but your poetry is strong and eloquent, and the imagery is reality. Look me up some time. I write comedy.
    Steve
    A Mad Merseyside Poet (Report) Reply

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