moon shadow
the little gray mouse
edges toward the cheese
placed 5th in the December 2007 Shiki Monthly Kukai (free format)
This is as good a 'ku as i've seen on here. What else is there in the mouse's world, but that cheese? Watch out for the- (SMACK!) ...
a good haiku...poet is not self -absorbed and discrete from the object, a real haiku...
In wintry night cat catch the crying mice is it tears or dew............... Good write........
Ben,5th place? -your haiku should have been in first place! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! a ten from me...
wow a lovely haiku mouse edging to cheese -10 anjali (read mine too haikus of love)
nice one..a 'koo'ing image on the moon and the cloudy spread...10
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
MOUSEY PUT YOUR CRASH HELMET ON FIRST LOL! Thanks Ben Love duncan X