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I've been hurting for a while now
And I don't know what to do anymore
After all I've been through
Feels like I'd be better if I did give in
Because I know this pain will never go away
No one will ever see all that I hold inside
No one even tries to get close to me
Just laying here dying inside slowly
Pain twisting around in me
Inside and out pain is all around me
No matter where I go or who I see
I hide it all underneath
Underneath my skin
No one will ever understand me
No one even sees the pain I hold inside
I can cry a few thousand tears and no one would
even notice
Seems like no matter what I do
Nobody will ever notice me not even if I'm dying on the ground
Nov 28,2008
ESPN CHICK
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Comments about this poem (A Pain Looked Over
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Connie Leigh Lindsay (5/24/2009 9:09:00 PM)
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I really liked this one.It described exactly how I feel at times.And you can't really tell anyone close to you how you feel.I tried one time and was told that I was being too dramatic.Since then I just say that they wouldn't understand.
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Greenwolfe 1962 (4/1/2009 10:44:00 PM)
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I agree with several others that you have a lot of wonderful phrases in this piece.
Some of them are quite powerful in their impact on the reader. The reader wants
to help you right now. Yours, is really a call to action. I think whoever reads it
feels that way.
GW62
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Angela Anna (11/28/2008 10:24:00 PM)
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wow. i love this poem.
'Just laying here dying inside slowly
Pain twisting around in me
Inside and out pain is all around me
No matter where I go or who I see' <- my favorite.
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*Trusting You* (11/28/2008 10:02:00 PM)
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No one even sees the pain I hold inside
I can cry a few thousand tears and no one would
even notice
I know of that... people think I am all happiness and giggles but really I have a lot of pain just hiden inside me. good job.
Becca
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