Theodora (Theo) Onken

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(((After The Rain))) - Poem by Theodora (Theo) Onken

I missed you the other day
When the dew left its diamond glitter upon the grass
And the squirrels and frogs were frolicking merry
When the silence of daybreak calmed
And the sunrise ever warmed
With its gentle rays dancing across my skin
Giving me hints of a fluffy white cloud or two
Promising an entire new day
Of peace and contentment
A perfect day-this
But for the glaring-almost blindingly-blazing
Absence of you


October 20,2010
Dedicated to: Renee Nicole (Rainspirit)

Topic(s) of this poem: death of a friend, loss

Form: Free Verse


Poet's Notes about The Poem

About the loss of a dear soul in death. She was so young but breast cancer took her life.

Comments about (((After The Rain))) by Theodora (Theo) Onken

  • Bharati Nayak Bharati Nayak (5/20/2016 3:28:00 AM)

    Beautiful, poignant expressions of feeling at the death of a dear friend.
    The absence felt so so strongly! (Report) Reply

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  • Theodora Onken (5/2/2016 5:26:00 AM)

    Thank you so much Pamela for your reading and commenting. This was a write about a friend by the name Renee Nicole (Rainspirit) who died at a very young age from breast cancer, She was always there for all of us and brave to her last breath. (Report) Reply

    Pamela Sinicrope Pamela Sinicrope (5/21/2016 2:19:00 PM)

    Such a tragedy. I'm so sorry for your loss. Beautiful name and tribute to her.

  • Theodora Onken (5/2/2016 5:14:00 AM)

    Pamela, thank you so much for reading and commenting. This was a write about a friend who passed away at a very young age from breast cancer. Her name was Renee Nicole but went by (Rainspirit) . She touched so many lives and was always there for all of us. She was a very brave young woman, (Report) Reply

  • Pamela Sinicrope Pamela Sinicrope (5/1/2016 7:38:00 PM)

    Beautiful poem about rain and the absence of someone you are about on a day full of beauty that should be perfect but for their absence. Beautiful poetic imagery expressed. (Report) Reply

  • Theodora Onken (4/30/2016 5:23:00 PM)

    Susan, your kind words have made my day. Try to check my writes daily and thank those who have commented. Although, i have fallen short on that way too many times. Am grateful that i got my message across to you. Knew i needed to explain why i wrote this and finally was able to. Again, i thank you from the bottom of my heart...am now going over to your work and read some of your brilliance. (Report) Reply

  • Susan Williams Susan Williams (4/30/2016 3:23:00 PM)

    You accomplished your mission. You made your reader, who knew nothing of your friend, feel the sudden hole in an otherwise perfect day. Excellent build-up and we were tripping lightly through that day the sunrise ever warmed
    With its gentle rays dancing across my skin
    Giving me hints of a fluffy white cloud or two
    Promising an entire new day
    and then in a few more words we felt that almost unbearable sadness in our own hearts as we remember losing the ones we loved. Poignant and beautiful piece. (Report) Reply

  • Theodora Onken (4/25/2016 2:20:00 PM)

    This poem was written when we lost a very, very good friend. Her name was Renee Nicole- and she left this life way to early. It left an almost unbearable sadness in our hearts. (Report) Reply

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    (((After The Rain))) - Poem by Theodora (Theo) Onken


    I missed you the other day
    When the dew left its diamond glitter upon the grass....too very poignant wrought in plaintive stance yet by the flares of nature, yet with beautiful style and diction flowing through imagery. (Report) Reply

  • Susan Lacovara Susan Lacovara (8/27/2015 12:17:00 PM)

    The intense light of someone's absence can blind rhe heart to see little eles. i sometimes think you gave a window seat into my very soul. Your words, a cintinuance of comfort. PEACE. (Report) Reply

  • Akhtar Jawad Akhtar Jawad (6/21/2015 9:29:00 PM)

    A sweet poem with a nice stylish description. (Report) Reply

  • Howard 'the motivational poet' Simon Howard 'the motivational poet' Simon (6/15/2015 11:01:00 AM)

    Beautifully presented my friend! (Report) Reply

  • Bernard Snyder Bernard Snyder (6/11/2015 12:46:00 PM)

    I like the imageries! Well-worded poem. Thanks! (Report) Reply

  • Tushar Ray Tushar Ray (3/17/2015 9:48:00 PM)

    A very rare and great poetic expression of sadness and gladness together; both being the expressions of love. I enjoyed very much. (Report) Reply

  • Howard 'the motivational poet' Simon Howard 'the motivational poet' Simon (12/15/2014 10:31:00 PM)

    A compelling and creative composition that as simply beautiful! (Report) Reply

  • Savita Tyagi (12/15/2014 11:35:00 AM)

    Lovely poem. Love supersedes the charm of nature. (Report) Reply

  • Bernard Snyder Bernard Snyder (12/15/2014 11:29:00 AM)

    Very, very nicely said. Great imagery! Congrats! (Report) Reply

  • John Richter (12/15/2014 7:46:00 AM)

    Very poignant.... Delicious ending thought (Report) Reply

  • Aftab Alam Khursheed Aftab Alam Khursheed (12/15/2014 2:11:00 AM)

    A nice poem with pearl like words- I missed you the other day When the dew left its diamond glitter upon the grass thanks and congrats for the selection as poem of the day (Report) Reply

  • Rajnish Manga Rajnish Manga (12/15/2014 1:58:00 AM)

    Even when the nature was happy to sower its bounties all around, the absence of a loved one makes it immaterial to us. Thanks for this beautiful piece of poetry. Congrats for 'Poem of the Day'. (Report) Reply

  • V P Mahur V P Mahur (3/11/2014 4:02:00 PM)

    Dear Onken
    I agree with you. The absence of loved one makes even a good sight ugly.

    'Swing of Spring'
    The soft swing of fresh air
    Has brought joyous glare
    Moist with drenching love
    Engaged in the idol affair
    ............................
    ......................
    I want to share this poem with you.
    full of it you can find on my page. (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Wednesday, October 20, 2010

Poem Edited: Tuesday, May 3, 2016


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