David McLansky

Rookie - 599 Points (5/24/1944 / New York City)

Answer To Valsa George's Quest for An Anonymous Lover


As I stole into your garden
The conifers thick upon the margin;
Sharp with needles that pinched my skin
That didn't want to let me in;

Couldn't you have left the gate unlatched?
Why did I have to be pricked and scratched
Was this some form of test or hurdle
To prove my worth to access your girdle?

I saw you standing at your window
Framed in a yellow after glow;
I saw you unwrap your sari dress;
I saw your bosom and was quite impressed;

I tried to climb your latticed deck
A swarml of bees settled on my neck;
I lost my footing as they stung
And slipped down several wooden rungs;

Then I was surrounded by a canine pack
Who bared their teeth ready to attack;
Fortunately your husband came along,
And extricated me from their milling throng

I am too old for these mad excursions
I should seek out more safe diversions;
Perhaps I could join you for tea and scones
I'd be glad to visit when your husband's home.

Submitted: Wednesday, February 26, 2014
Edited: Sunday, September 14, 2014

Topic of this poem: love

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  • Rookie - 29 Points Colleen Courtney (5/31/2014 7:39:00 PM)

    Hahahahahahahahahahahahahahahaha! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! !
    Did I make my point? This is such a great poem! Loaded with tasteful humor! I certainly needed a good chuckle today and your poem gave me full out belly laughs!
    You did an amazing job with this piece David! Kudos to you! ! ! ! (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 4,751 Points Bri Edwards (3/3/2014 7:03:00 PM)

    To prove my worth to access your girdle? ..............i laughed aloud at this line, especially since i know Valsa....but not in THAT way. i shall try to remember to ask her if she has seen this!

    in online urban dictionary the first definition of afterglow (you wrote after glow) is:

    Afterglow
    The feeling after an orgasm ...............i must have just paid her a visit! forgive me, valsa's husband; i'm just kidding! ;)

    if you use two? ? in the second stanza, why not three? ? ? ..........?

    overall i have to say i love this poem. i have sent it to MyPornList. i mean MyPoemList. thanks for sharing.

    p.s. there IS a key under the door mat. bri :)

    [love the rhyming, humor, and punctuation. oh yeah, the story also.] (Report) Reply

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