Yvonne Rautenbach

Rookie - 12 Points (Aquarian - I am over 50 / UK)

Ashanti Boy - Poem by Yvonne Rautenbach

Shining black moon
Thrilled with teeth
Come to our shores
Of gold and grief
Ashanti boy
Loving his books
Passing good grades
And clothes on their hooks
Submissive but sure
Goals in his sight
Shining black star
His tutor's delight
clutching his Bible
Posting his wages
Part time in burgers
And cleaning out cages
Achieving his aim
Professional job
Turning up early and
Earning a bob
He never seems tired he never gets fat
And people suspicious....
How did he do that?

Comments about Ashanti Boy by Yvonne Rautenbach

  • Rookie - 29 Points Robert Howard (9/13/2008 4:47:00 PM)

    This strikes me as a kind of verbal pointillism. After you connect all the dots and fill in the spaces a fairly complete and charming portrait emerges. (Report) Reply

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  • Rookie Andrew mark Wilkinson (7/7/2007 4:19:00 PM)

    Kind of bounces along, nice Rhythm to it...10 (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 7 Points Max Reif (7/7/2007 1:26:00 PM)

    says something. You have something to say here, and you say it. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 0 Points Raveendran . (7/7/2007 11:57:00 AM)

    Good work. There is a nice beat, suits the mood. (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Saturday, July 7, 2007

Poem Edited: Saturday, March 19, 2011

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