Fiona Davidson

Rookie - 26 Points (From beyond time)

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This vigil cripples my thoughts
Drags me down into shadows
Darkest depths that smother
With each breath you take

I try to rise above to the stars
But a heaviness pulls at my feet
Places my soul in a room of pain
Battles fought and lost surround us

Loneliness is a blanket
I shrug off as it masks me
Strength is only an illusion
Within these walls flickering

Your hands shake with the effort now
As life begins to open doors best closed

Submitted: Tuesday, August 25, 2009
Edited: Monday, June 06, 2011

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  • Rookie Paul Cutting (9/14/2009 6:28:00 AM)

    you need only rise above the clouds to see the stars.

    I do love this poem, very beautifully sad.

    PC (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Barbara Terry (9/5/2009 10:49:00 PM)

    I agree with what a lot have said here. It took me years to realize that I opened so many doors best left closed. I am going through my mind now and closing those doors. This is a sad and painful poem to read but it didn't trigger any sad thoughts. A 10+++++.

    Love & hugs,
    Barbara (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Sue Sie (8/29/2009 6:41:00 PM)

    Your strength is drawn from.. a heart of gold holding together the pieces of love and care, fear and anxiety....that heart is yours...x
    Sue
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  • Rookie Georgia Girl (8/25/2009 8:32:00 AM)

    sad but so well written, sometimes it takes all that we have to keep our heads out of the water...great write..10 (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 12 Points Fay Slimm (8/25/2009 3:45:00 AM)

    Your insight becomes brilliant Fi... and your pen has become tinged with a golden touch.... this piece will stay with me - - Fay. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Catrina Heart (8/25/2009 3:11:00 AM)

    Loneliness is a blanket
    I shrug off as it masks me
    Strength is only an illusion
    Within these walls flickering
    -----
    first class imagery..........loved it! ! ! ! (Report) Reply

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