under a just bathed sky
they sat sipping
hot cup of tea
the right head phone
in his ear and the left in hers
the vapours rose
from the two cups
and together blended
into the surrounding vast space
beyond the horizon
the morning raga
filled their capillaries
with a single melody
within the frame
with a clear sky above
they made a perfect
picture post-card
of harmony in every possible angle
beyond the frame
each was locked
in one's own world
17oct2009
11.20hrs
...visible was not visible to their eyes but invisible was very much within the frame...a nice poem, indira....
you have taken the readers to their teen age. nice shan
May be an ad or a picture-card or if I'm incorrect a real scene has inspired you to feel a morning raga out of it....your style can however inspire the reader....thank you Indira
yes...a deep and...well, intriguing poem. interesting. wonderfully expressed. thank you.
The feel is more important than the frame, good one, Indira.10
ye; the flavour and the fumes are one and different at the same time...nice presentation...thanks
A charming portrait of two lovers framed with a poet's eye. I love your 'just bathed sky'. Your final couplet is intriguing and leaves the reader wondering. Love, Allie ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥
A brilliant piece Indira, rich in imagery in the first part and ending with a stunning impact which tears off the pretension in the relationship. A perfect 10.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
You aptly titled this poem 'beyond the frame' for this is the take home message. Cliches such as 'looking beyond the obvious' or 'things aren't what they seem' or 'don't describe a book by its cover' similarly describe this beyond the frame perspective. However, you have done well to pen this idea so elegantly in your own words. It also fittingly portrays the current role of electronic music devices in our world today. A delightful and thought provoking read. Thanks for sharing.