Marieta Maglas

Rookie - 962 Points (19-05-1964 / Radauti, Judet Suceava, Romania)

Cleopatra


Under the mask of gold,
I see only venomous snakes
Poisoning her name forever....

Submitted: Sunday, May 17, 2009
Edited: Sunday, February 08, 2015

Topic of this poem: snake


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  • Veteran Poet - 3,172 Points Rm. Shanmugam Chettiar (1/9/2010 8:08:00 AM)

    i appreciate your view. kindly read my poem Cleopatra's glory. shan (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 85 Points Nivedita Bagchi SPC UK (1/7/2010 10:53:00 AM)

    Yeah it’s true…but Beauty of Cleo…undoubtedly non venomous in eyes of beauty admirers …
    10 not for venom…but for beauty of dear Cleo
    Ms. Nivedita
    UK (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Braja K Sarkar (12/29/2009 6:05:00 AM)

    Really wonderful poem...I like this very much.. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Bob Genevro (12/8/2009 12:22:00 PM)

    Hi Marieta,
    'Cleopatra' works well as haiku. I like the gold and asp references because they are two images at opposite ends tugging with each other. Cleopatra still has that animal magnetism that attracts writers and readers. I'm wondering if you're going to keep playing and experimenting with haiku. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Rahul Aithal (12/7/2009 10:44:00 AM)

    Wow! short but killing. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Fergus Condron (11/20/2009 7:45:00 AM)

    Hi Marieta,

    You started so well......too short, you could really make this great, remember how she was used by Ceaser, then cast aside by Mark Anthony.....the venomous snakes were the men in her life.....you have a good style but if you sit back and think of the great nation of Egypt and all the pressure on her, you could really make this a tragic poem, you have the skill to do it...why not? I only gave you a 4 this time.....but await you to resubmit or penn a new one? A challenge from me to you....... (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 15 Points Eyan Desir (11/10/2009 5:10:00 PM)

    hmmm, nice
    short but well said (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Ramin Chaman (11/7/2009 1:57:00 AM)

    a famous queen of Egypt


    ...
    Hello Mari

    a nice poem..and compact.. indeed a good write..

    for this 10+

    . (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Roy Martinez (10/30/2009 2:55:00 PM)

    A lifetime story of this beauty in a lifetime of tenacity (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Margaret Donaghy (10/30/2009 1:35:00 PM)

    Very short poem, but totally accurate. love it (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 0 Points Alf Hutchison (10/29/2009 3:19:00 PM)

    A great topic in so few words... brilliant Regards Alf (Report) Reply

  • Rookie ****Hanaring Tamara.. (10/26/2009 10:27:00 AM)

    a historical beautiful poem.. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Susan Russell (10/25/2009 12:17:00 PM)

    great job! ! ! i loved that poem....
    10 (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 69 Points Sathyanarayana M V S (10/22/2009 10:07:00 PM)

    A cute analysis of Cleopatra, in few words.....great. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Philip Winchester (10/3/2009 4:51:00 AM)

    Many a true word spoken in but a small sentence.
    You have nailed it with this one, I sometimes take Five
    Hundred words to say as much, but can recognise your
    brevity as true CLASS.
    Well written and Thanks for your note.
    Kind Regards
    Philip (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Agnes Parker (10/2/2009 7:31:00 AM)

    An interesting write on Cleopatra....you have focussed on her tragic end...good job (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Abigail Roscoe (9/30/2009 1:25:00 PM)

    Very short, but totally accurate. love it! .............. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Oche Babs (9/27/2009 7:20:00 AM)

    this is the shortest poem i have ever sen. u are good. 7points (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Ivan Kodorkovski (9/26/2009 6:02:00 PM)

    a beautiful three liner for alady, larger than life, like cleopatra (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Sergio Bruno (9/26/2009 5:47:00 PM)

    great job! ! ! i loved that poem....keep writing! ! (Report) Reply

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