Amir Foroughi

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Don't Fall Asleep


To my beloved and her lost grave
Uncanny
Emerald eyes of her over to save
Me, nothing more to be say
When she wept the cry of silence
Forgive me for all I was
Forgive me for all I shall not
Watt
Before the rut
Uncanny
Voices of all strings
Shattered in tornado
Tornado of blood
Blood of loss
Uncanny
No words
Words words words
I felt like the ghost of laura

Submitted: Tuesday, June 30, 2009

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Comments about this poem (Don't Fall Asleep by Amir Foroughi )

  • Rookie - 4 Points Nader Baheri (11/27/2012 10:08:00 AM)

    admirable, fascinating one.with wonderful flowing of prosees and verses.
    i enjoyed its bitter style.
    thankenstein~nb (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 4 Points Nader Baheri (11/27/2012 10:07:00 AM)

    admirable, fascinating one.with wonderful flowing of prosees and verses.
    i enjoyed its bitter style.
    thankenstein~nb (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Mehraneh Hosseini (11/26/2012 11:29:00 AM)

    Hi,
    Impressive, Well done, Very very touching.
    Forgive me for all I was
    Forgive me for all I shall not
    I dont know why but It reminds me one of those poem that I read while passing university courses, Its name is C.L.M By John Masefield.
    Hope to read more of you: p: p: p (Report) Reply

  • Freshman - 1,007 Points Unwritten Soul (10/4/2011 11:32:00 AM)

    So deep like always, but what a sad thing is you always make me sad...Wish there's some poem of yours make me smile again...Write more Amir, dont forget you hold talents that people rarely have...Keep on :) _Unwritten Soul (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Jeff Pua (4/5/2010 1:40:00 AM)

    I just have to echo what the others said.. this poem has a good flow.. and is a bit interesting.. thank you for sharing this.. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Heather Hilley (3/12/2010 12:24:00 PM)

    I like it, Very interesting, I like your work :) (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Heather Hilley (3/12/2010 12:24:00 PM)

    I like it, Very interesting, I like your work :) (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Lewis Adheks (11/21/2009 3:42:00 AM)

    nice work, Amir
    i admire ur diction of love (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Chitra - (7/8/2009 11:46:00 PM)

    deep and interesting..fine flow to it (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 1 Points Kafil Uddin Raihan (7/5/2009 10:13:00 AM)

    Very Interesting, Really well penned. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 15 Points Eyan Desir (7/1/2009 6:19:00 PM)

    this poem has a good flow
    and was interesting (Report) Reply

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