Everyday
i see you walking past
and i look away,
as if i never knew you,
as if you never knew me.
We used to be friends
before they came along,
Each gave away our trust.
In the end
our friendship became distant
and could not compromise.
Yesterday
we saw each walking past,
as usual we almost approached
before our other friends came along
and we both looked away,
as if we weren't about to cure
our broken hearts of lost friendship,
as if we never knew each other.
It's a seemly poem. A nice one that is able to potray the longing and hurt that you wanted to paint. There's quite a number of stories with storylines similar to the plot here, and many poets have tried to express it in their poetry. Most do not really pass though.Thus, I think you have done a commendable job here as it does evoke my feelings. For more moving poetry, perhaps you could play around with the pauses. Sense pauses and pauses caused by punctuation marks and line spacings can add added impact to a phrase or line. So, do try it out sometime! Meanwhile, thanks for a nice read, and hope u have a nice day ahead!
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
a true friend takes that first step... nice poem M A