Mandi June

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Fallen


Drawing nigh, the time of choice inside my fiery soul
Digs deeper. All the while, lacking balance takes its toll.
The stone and mortar build a base from cold and empty ground
Erect, at length, the structure that has now come tumbling down.
The wonder then, that plagues my mind is 'Why? What did it lack? '
And 'How much effort will it take; these bricks, again, to stack? '
The trust and hope and faith, and all these things that once were known
They have been tested, yes, but this to you must not be shown.
Will ever, in security my life be fully yours?
Eternal relics of my heart remind me, 'Love endures.'

Submitted: Tuesday, January 01, 2013
Edited: Wednesday, May 29, 2013

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  • Silver Star - 3,175 Points Valerie Dohren (3/17/2013 10:31:00 AM)

    Excellent write Mandi, full of meaning. Great read. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 33 Points Mark Dillon (1/2/2013 8:32:00 AM)

    Great writing, loved it, so strong and full on emotion, yet sad. (Report) Reply

  • Freshman - 963 Points Saadat Tahir (1/1/2013 10:35:00 PM)

    The wonder then, that plagues my mind is 'Why? What did it lack? '
    And 'How much effort will it take; these bricks, again, to stack? '

    it is a from the heart poem
    the load is writ large, is palpable and rings clarion clear.
    i quoted just one verse....but really it is so musical and well written....i should have quoted the entire poem.
    beautifully written, full marks.
    :) (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 6 Points Connor Whyte (1/1/2013 8:51:00 PM)

    A very intelligent writing, To build a structure for it to come down and all that wasted attempt to be done only way to solve is to build again,
    Very good write I enjoyed it. (Report) Reply

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