hasmukh amathalal

Gold Star - 38,557 Points (17/05/1947 / Vadali, Dist: - sabarkantha, Gujarat, India)

Liberally Permit - Poem by hasmukh amathalal

I was crying foul but proved incorrect
I was told to be patient and advised to act
In line with others and shun the reality
This was almost to be done with sincerity

Poets here are well behaved and mannered
Read articles only of those who are favored
Go after nothing but only on praised lines
Hardly one or two read and put on side lines

I beg them to be strictly real
Let there be looked as no deal
Why best articles are not read and commented?
Is the fault of readers who still think of being tormented?

Why someone should be leniently viewed?
If he is to be guided properly and screwed
That gives him enough of room to justify
Improve in writing and satisfy

I think this is real objective
One can not afford to be selective
Gender discrimination may be there
But we are strictly readers here

One of the main misconceptions here is about collection
The readers must have liberal mind if someone is keen on adoption
Those pictures help in presenting correct picture
Unless they are used to malign and torture

Keep those pictures under utmost secrecy
Give clear instruction and restrict entry
There is nothing wrong if you liberally permit
For use in poems and willingly greet


Comments about Liberally Permit by hasmukh amathalal

  • Gold Star - 38,557 Points Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (7/18/2013 11:45:00 PM)

    Rory Pollaro4 minutes ago
    I really get what you are saying. I don't think myself a terrible poet and I see poems that are clearly worse get better scores. Not vain, but I think a poem on the fate of a lost couple beats hell out of a poem about a Jelly sandwich. I also hate getting reviews that just say, Nice. I want to learn and improve, to do so, I need honest constructive critique.
    Comment +1
    Read one another's poems with an open mind, don't be scared to tell someone what they're doing wrong, and try to guide one another to a higher field of writing. (Report) Reply

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  • Gold Star - 38,557 Points Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (7/18/2013 11:45:00 PM)

    interesting


    Angel Heady19 minutes ago
    very well written poem.
    Comment +1
    HARD TO FOLLOW RHYTHM WISE

    Rory Pollaro4 minutes ago
    I really get what you are saying. I don't think myself a terrible poet and I see poems that are clearly worse get better scores. Not vain, but I think a poem on the fate of a lost couple beats hell out of a poem about a Jelly sandwich. I also hate getting reviews that just say, Nice. I want to learn and improve, to do so, I need honest constructive critique.
    Comment +1
    Read one another's poems with an open mind, don't be scared to tell someone what they're doing wrong, and try to guide one another to a higher field of writing.

    Sean Spencer12 minutes ago
    I had a bit of trouble following it, just because of you're writing style, but unless I completely missed the point then I think you had some good points. it seemed to me you were saying that although we all come to this page to share with each other, we also hvae to be sure we don't baby one another. If a poet is to improve, we have to be shown what we're doing wrong. So if that's what you meant, then I totally agree!
    Comment +1
    Better think twice. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 38,557 Points Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (7/18/2013 11:44:00 PM)

    Sean Spencer12 minutes ago
    I had a bit of trouble following it, just because of you're writing style, but unless I completely missed the point then I think you had some good points. it seemed to me you were saying that although we all come to this page to share with each other, we also hvae to be sure we don't baby one another. If a poet is to improve, we have to be shown what we're doing wrong. So if that's what you meant, then I totally agree!
    Comment +1
    Better think twice. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 38,557 Points Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (7/18/2013 11:43:00 PM)

    interesting


    Angel Heady19 minutes ago
    very well written poem.
    Comment +1
    HARD TO FOLLOW RHYTHM WISE

    Rory Pollaro4 minutes ago
    I really get what you are saying. I don't think myself a terrible poet and I see poems that are clearly worse get better scores. Not vain, but I think a poem on the fate of a lost couple beats hell out of a poem about a Jelly sandwich. I also hate getting reviews that just say, Nice. I want to learn and improve, to do so, I need honest constructive critique.
    Comment +1
    Read one another's poems with an open mind, don't be scared to tell someone what they're doing wrong, and try to guide one another to a higher field of writing.

    Sean Spencer12 minutes ago
    I had a bit of trouble following it, just because of you're writing style, but unless I completely missed the point then I think you had some good points. it seemed to me you were saying that although we all come to this page to share with each other, we also hvae to be sure we don't baby one another. If a poet is to improve, we have to be shown what we're doing wrong. So if that's what you meant, then I totally agree!
    Comment +1
    Better think twice.


    Donald Rogerson15 minutes ago
    How do you be liberal and restrict entry at the same time? I usually prefer to set politics aside and keep my opinions on the subject secret. I am neither a conservative or a liberal. Nor am I middle of the road. I take the road less traveled. I avoid the paths of least resistance. I don't follow political trends because I'm a non conformist. On the bright side I'd say your English is very good. On the other hand, when it comes to gender, I'd rather spend my life making love to millions of women only, and let them screw any man they want, because that's pure freedom and love. And it sure beats those fags who'd rather (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 38,557 Points Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (7/18/2013 11:34:00 PM)

    I was crying foul but proved incorrect
    I was told to be patient and advised to act (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Thursday, July 18, 2013

Poem Edited: Friday, July 19, 2013


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