Love You Forever Poem by Kranthi Pothineni

Love You Forever

Rating: 5.0


Her one killing look
Made my heart hook
Her one cute smile
Made me jump mile
Into ocean of love

Her one sweet word
Made me fly world
Her one beautiful move
Made my heart rove
Into ocean of love

Her one caring call
Made me forget all
Her one pure query
Made my heart quest
Into ocean of love

Her one heart beat
Made my heart beat
Her one helping hand
Made me sail sand
Into ocean of love

Her one painful tear
Made my heart tear
Her one silent promise
Made me also promise
I love you dear forever

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Janell Cressman 08 April 2009

I just have to ask who made you want to write that poem who did you write it for because who ever did is lucky to know you! ! ! ! ! ! AMAZING POEM! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! !

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Catrina Heart 09 April 2009

WOW! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! This was just so plain and simple yet so heartfelt, sweet and romantic...........LOVE YOU FOREVER.............written with great end rhymes and rhythm...10

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Naseer Ahmed Nasir 09 April 2009

How beautiful she is, Kranthi, like this poem, like rhymes and rhythm of this poem. A wonderful love tribute.

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Dr Hitesh Sheth 09 April 2009

another poem with rhymes and rhythm............a beautiful write.........

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Eyan Desir 10 April 2009

Great flow as always good work

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Louis Rams 09 April 2009

as carl says**** your english may not be the best. but your expression of love does. good write

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Sathyanarayana M V S 09 April 2009

Beautiful poem Kranti. Very well structured with apt, sweet sounding words. Very effective love poem

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Carl Harris 09 April 2009

This is a beautifully expressed poem, Kranthi, and it attemps rhyming nobly, but because you are writing in a second or third language, your grammar and rhyming needs some help. I know it is very difficult to do so as well as a person who normally speaks English all of the time can do, though some of them even have problems with our language! I will look over your poem and offer some suggestions to you via messsage to improve your rhyming (some words do not rhyme with each other at all) and the way it is phrased (grammar is the problem) . Still, it is the sentiment expressed in this poem that make it a very appealing write. Carl.

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Joseph Poewhit 09 April 2009

Men do put women on a pedestal at times

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