I see you standing next to me, ready to depart.
I wish to say something, but can't, over the beat of my heart.
I don't want you to go, to leave me all alone.
I see you take that first step, first step away from home.
Leavin' me here, I'm dying, crying, wishing to hold you close.
You have to go, I know, you know, everybody knows.
Finally you're gone, gone into the wild.
And here you've left me, left me all alone.
Kaitlyn Mae Henning
Wow! I liked it very much. It's personal, it's deep, I coul feel what you wrote. Great flow.
Kaitlyn, your 'flow' as da rappers say, is amazing. I love the 'over the beat od my heart' line; it very much draws the reader into recognizing the experience. I also like the 'everybody knows' line; not only is it an excellent choice of rhyme, but it includes a whole into a very intimate setting, which is impressive. Bises pour toi! ! !
Wow! This is a good poem. I am not sure if it is a mother saying goodbye to her child or if someone is leaving their boyfriend/girlfriend. It is a awesome poem and has a nice smooth rhyme.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
this one totally flows to the beat of my heart =) wow, i'm a cheese-flake. But really...it's amazing. it completey pounds with emotion