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Jahan zaib

(February 05,1981 / Malakand Pakistan)

My Helen

In a garden green we sat
My hand in yours
Yours held I
Roses around
Stars in the sky
Moon in full bloom
And the gentle breeze
Hither and thither
Move the blades of grass
The fire-flies flew
Around me and you
In restless heart of mine
The passion slowly grew
Closer I got
Pressed hand tight
No more in the world
Nor the nature's sight
The numberless glowworms
Around you revolved
In beauty and the charm
Resting on my arm
A newly wedded groom
Envious the moon
Jealousy in stars,
For resting on my arm
Was Helen of the Troy

Submitted: Friday, November 09, 2012
Edited: Friday, November 09, 2012

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This poem is dedicated to Saeed Jan

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  • So Close (11/15/2012 8:38:00 AM)

    yeah its good and fully packed with emotions good work...

    »so close« (Report) Reply

  • Hazel Durham (11/13/2012 9:30:00 AM)

    Beautiful, so delicately written with lovely imagery. Inspired write! Thanks for sharing. (Report) Reply

  • Www. (11/12/2012 9:32:00 AM)

    The irony is the powerful co existence of a poetic mind that is never devoid of elusive romantic flutters. The notes on the dark and shady spaces have finally been replaced by this brilliant write one on a breathing sign. (Report) Reply

  • Unwritten Soul (11/11/2012 10:18:00 AM)

    Awww the poem made of sweetest nectar for sweet fellow...Hmm i think Saaed Jan smile like a bright sun reading the best fragrance poem from you..such a nice time here_SOul (Report) Reply

  • Elena Sandu (11/11/2012 7:46:00 AM)

    In beauty and love we could get rid of space time and death. Brilliant, loved it! Thank you for share. (Report) Reply

  • Gulsher John (11/10/2012 6:47:00 PM)

    wow mind blowing as the only word i could phrase for this
    sweetly rhyme with poignant end note..... (Report) Reply

  • Stevie Taite (11/10/2012 1:08:00 AM)

    An utterly beautiful
    Write! I love that you made stars and moon envious of you love and happiness. You produce perfect magical imagery with your words! (Report) Reply

  • * Sunprincess * (11/9/2012 12:21:00 PM) painted a beautiful scene..the one you dedicated this one
    to is definitely a very special person..this is a wonderul
    the imagery..fabulous.. :) (Report) Reply

  • Greg Uhan (11/9/2012 10:10:00 AM)

    such love delivered with each line, I think my favorite would have to be, 'The numberless glowworms/ Around you revolved', such starry eyed charms, a gem to be shared with lovers everywhere. (Report) Reply

  • Saeed Jan (11/9/2012 8:33:00 AM)

    My Helen.... This is fabulous... written in jubilant mood with pride of having his beloved with him... he feels himself to be the richest person of the world with bounties of happiness and beauties around....
    For resting on my arm
    Was Helen of Troy...
    U made me speechless.... Thumbs up for! ! (Report) Reply

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