Jahan zaib

Rookie - 96 Points (February 05,1981 / Malakand Pakistan)

My Helen - Poem by Jahan zaib

In a garden green we sat
My hand in yours
Yours held I
Roses around
Stars in the sky
Moon in full bloom
And the gentle breeze
Hither and thither
Move the blades of grass
The fire-flies flew
Around me and you
In restless heart of mine
The passion slowly grew
Closer I got
Pressed hand tight
No more in the world
Nor the nature's sight
The numberless glowworms
Around you revolved
In beauty and the charm
Resting on my arm
A newly wedded groom
Envious the moon
Jealousy in stars,
For resting on my arm
Was Helen of the Troy

Poet's Notes about The Poem

This poem is dedicated to Saeed Jan

Comments about My Helen by Jahan zaib

  • Gold Star - 50,721 Points Chinedu Dike (1/12/2015 6:24:00 AM)

    A lovely romantic poem, well articulated and subtly penned to capture the bliss of love mutually felt between a happy and loving couple. A beautiful poem indeed. Thanks for sharing and do keep it up. Please read my poem MANDELA - THE IMMORTAL ICON. (Report) Reply

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  • Rookie - 11 Points Sahil Sood (11/17/2012 8:29:00 AM)

    a very beautiful poem sir, luvd the way you xpressd emotions.. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Nabila ima (11/16/2012 11:41:00 PM)

    Nice poem and you can express what you feel. I like it (Report) Reply

  • Rookie So Close (11/15/2012 8:38:00 AM)

    yeah its good and fully packed with emotions good work...

    »so close« (Report) Reply

  • Silver Star - 4,127 Points Dave Walker (11/15/2012 7:54:00 AM)

    A very beautiful and fantastic poem.
    A great tribute. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 11,686 Points Hazel Durham (11/13/2012 9:30:00 AM)

    Beautiful, so delicately written with lovely imagery. Inspired write! Thanks for sharing. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Www. Poemhunter.com/m-d-dinesh-nair-2 (11/12/2012 9:32:00 AM)

    The irony is the powerful co existence of a poetic mind that is never devoid of elusive romantic flutters. The notes on the dark and shady spaces have finally been replaced by this brilliant write one on a breathing sign. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 307 Points Vijay Sai R (11/12/2012 8:30:00 AM)

    a fascinating piece of poetry (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 49 Points Anita Sehgal (11/11/2012 10:23:00 AM)

    very romantic.poem..! . (Report) Reply

  • Bronze Star - 2,497 Points Unwritten Soul (11/11/2012 10:18:00 AM)

    Awww the poem made of sweetest nectar for sweet fellow...Hmm i think Saaed Jan smile like a bright sun reading the best fragrance poem from you..such a nice time here_SOul (Report) Reply

  • Bronze Star - 2,669 Points Elena Sandu (11/11/2012 7:46:00 AM)

    In beauty and love we could get rid of space time and death. Brilliant, loved it! Thank you for share. (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 1,490 Points Xelam Kan™ (11/10/2012 6:47:00 PM)

    wow mind blowing as the only word i could phrase for this
    sweetly rhyme with poignant end note..... (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 6 Points Stevie Taite (11/10/2012 1:08:00 AM)

    An utterly beautiful
    Write! I love that you made stars and moon envious of you love and happiness. You produce perfect magical imagery with your words! (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 4,717 Points Valerie Dohren (11/9/2012 3:47:00 PM)

    Beautifully written, inspired poem. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 36,824 Points * Sunprincess * (11/9/2012 12:21:00 PM)

    oh...you painted a beautiful scene..the one you dedicated this one
    to is definitely a very special person..this is a wonderul poem..love
    the imagery..fabulous.. :) (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 1,298 Points Tarobinson1103@gmail.com Robinson (11/9/2012 11:46:00 AM)

    beauty like a poem must be read to appreciate. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 0 Points Greg Uhan (11/9/2012 10:10:00 AM)

    such love delivered with each line, I think my favorite would have to be, 'The numberless glowworms/ Around you revolved', such starry eyed charms, a gem to be shared with lovers everywhere. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 184 Points Yoonoos Peerbocus (11/9/2012 9:29:00 AM)

    penned with much vehemence/ you have used a lot of [M]keep feeding us with your lovely vision (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 397 Points Poetheart Morgan (11/9/2012 8:47:00 AM)

    From Paris to your beautiful and perfect love Helen! ! ! Beautiful (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 0 Points Saeed Jan (11/9/2012 8:33:00 AM)

    My Helen.... This is fabulous... written in jubilant mood with pride of having his beloved with him... he feels himself to be the richest person of the world with bounties of happiness and beauties around....
    For resting on my arm
    Was Helen of Troy...
    U made me speechless.... Thumbs up for! ! (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Friday, November 9, 2012

Poem Edited: Friday, November 9, 2012

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