Treasure Island

Asif Baloch

(06-06-1978 / karachi)

My Tribute to Beautiful Minds


Feelings that I feel inside
Respect for the beautiful minds
They walk in front I follow them
With my head bowed and crossed my hands
The tears of joy for being with them
Stays on my lids as I read there thoughts
They read and write comments on my rhymes
They make me something which I’m not
By giving me space in the world of there thoughts
For me I’m nothing but a speck of sand
Struggling and trying to fit in this land
The land of kings and queens every where
Singing and spreading the lovely rhymes
Some are sad some in love
Some can see beyond this world
There are some who shows us dreams
With pen dip in love and sympathy
These lines are written as a tribute to them
For being so generous and kind to me

Submitted: Tuesday, September 09, 2008
Edited: Monday, May 03, 2010

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  • Evaughn Gray (10/4/2008 8:25:00 PM)

    wow Aijaz that was just beautiful just as your mind is, just as mine is.. it was really sweet and inviting..wonderful piece..~Hazel G.E (Report) Reply

  • Gargi Saha (9/26/2008 12:18:00 PM)

    u have a beautiful mind indeed.
    u get 10++
    Thanks for your nice comments on my poem A new road. (Report) Reply

  • Greenwolfe 1962 (9/24/2008 11:38:00 AM)

    The English grammar still needs some work, but not a lot.
    There are a lot of those born here who have trouble as well.
    The rhythms and rhymes are off a bit and need much more work.
    I was impressed by the selection of your structure, that was correct.
    The best part was the somplicity of your expression and the genuine
    tenderness that was very clear, as was the meaning. You got all the big stuff right. I recommend it for this reasn with an 8.

    GW62 (Report) Reply

  • Tj Becker (9/23/2008 4:37:00 PM)

    A wonderful write full of humility and respect for others.The was a special read, I'm glad I read this first. (Report) Reply

  • Sarwar Chowdhury (9/23/2008 1:21:00 PM)

    Ammmmazing peice Asif! it proofs u r endowed with great mind. Beautiful minds r to me as like flying colorfull butterfly. They emit tranquility.........+++++10 (Report) Reply

  • Emo Seb (9/22/2008 7:57:00 AM)

    well, judging by your poetry, you are one of those beautiful minds, too. kuz your poems sure are beautiful. (Report) Reply

  • Aijaz Asif (9/16/2008 7:58:00 AM)

    Respected fellow poets and all, first of all I would like to thank you all for reading my poems and posting your precious comments…these words are not said to please anyone..
    Now for the comment given by Mr.Ershad well Sir this poem’s not about pleasing you or anyone, as far as I know poems are the feelings which a person writes when he/she feels happy/sad, poems are emotions and in my all poems I write my emotions. In this poem I explain myself as a student learning from you and other poets, it’s the saying “put a smile on the face of one, you’ll find the heaven in this world” if putting smile on anyone’s lips is pleasing and if it’s wrong then I’m accepting the comments written by you and everyone who thinks that way. As far as I know the great poets from past and present had said some beautiful words about there teachers, readers and other poets in there poems as a gratitude or may be I’m wrong. (Report) Reply

  • Ershad Mazumder (9/14/2008 10:39:00 AM)

    Asif thanks for sharing this piece with us. But I am not with the theme.I compose not to please or make anybody happy. I write what I feel.That may not be good in readers eyes.Many poets on this earth left us unsung and unlamented.So do not compose for praise or appreciation.Just keep on composing. Just try know whether composing makes your soul happy. (Report) Reply

  • Chitra - (9/10/2008 5:41:00 AM)

    a very nice way of expressing gratitude goes to show that you are a truely virtuous person! (Report) Reply

  • Kesav Easwaran (9/10/2008 12:39:00 AM)

    Humility is the greatest of all virtues...to be good and to remain unassuming about it is a quality that is found rare...this worthy well written poem of yours speaks volumes of your good vision and about the vision that every writer must have in mind- his or hers...10 (Report) Reply

  • marvin brato (9/9/2008 11:22:00 PM)

    Classic poem that can last for life, even beyond! It exemplifies all poets who walk the same path being grateful, for not being alone! Thank you, another 10. (Report) Reply

  • Tarun Sharma (9/9/2008 10:44:00 PM)

    thank you friend for this beautiful work! it carry feelings of a kind heart wrapped into beautiful words!
    rgds (Report) Reply

  • Sulaiman Mohd Yusof (9/9/2008 9:12:00 PM)

    some people were born to be beautiful, mentally and physically.............how i wish..........and everyones wishes too.......! nice piece asif! (Report) Reply

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