Aufie Zophy

Freshman - 2,106 Points (18 October 1964)

Our Choice


Walking on a hot and scorching day
We meet a splitting of the way
A way downwards looking shady, some trees are there
A way upwards, sandy without trees, just looking bare

Somewhere deep inside we know
The downwards shady path goes low
And down that place, there is no tree
Just heat and sweat and more ennui

Somewhere deep inside we are aware
That the way up, though initially a little bare
Will bring us to a place with lots of shade and big relief
It is God’s way, so I believe

Shall we choose the way below with instant pleasure?
Leading down to a place of heat, we cannot measure
Or shall we make little effort on the upper way?
And enjoy shade and breeze day by day

Submitted: Sunday, June 06, 2010
Edited: Sunday, July 31, 2011

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  • Rookie - 0 Points Waseem A Malla (12/22/2012 12:21:00 AM)

    its a great reminder of the afterlife, and of the benefits of God's path... Excellent (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 52 Points Erika Wingo (11/23/2012 7:34:00 PM)

    Your talent is truly a gift to all who have the pleasure of reading your work. You are definitely one of my favorite poets. I just drift dreamily away to the final thrilling destination each of your poems takes the reader to. You have God given talent my friend! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 112 Points Robert Beck (10/28/2012 1:28:00 PM)

    All of your poems are created from deep thought
    and each offers the reader a lesson of life. You
    have a wise manner of writing and your mature
    wisdom always shines through. (Report) Reply

  • Silver Star - 3,112 Points Diane Hine (4/20/2012 5:57:00 AM)

    Very wise and enjoyable poem. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 15 Points Ekaterina M. Polischuk (3/30/2012 1:29:00 PM)

    awesome poem.... it is more than just a verse. it is a message. true words. really we should choose our way by ourself and we must know what way is right or wrong....
    Midway upon the journey of our life
    I found myself within a forest dark,
    For the straightforward pathway had been lost. (Dante Alighieri) (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Jerry Buckley (1/26/2012 5:49:00 PM)

    Great allegory.... Well done.. Thanks for your kind comment to Your Turn (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Richard McClellan (10/21/2011 10:36:00 AM)

    Awesome poem fellow poet! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Lenore Lee (9/8/2011 9:10:00 PM)

    Like all of your poems, this has an important meaning. I think it is heart moving and it says to me to be careful with your life choices, for instant pleasure is not always the best road. (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 1,060 Points Unwritten Soul (8/21/2011 3:25:00 AM)

    Some choices just clear as that, so we can rejoice like what it reflect...But some choices just blur and enveloped in mystery ground then we will hard to choose what the best without lose...It very nice poem and may birds will come and show us what the best, if shady tree turn autumn where the heat could reach both places.. :) _Unwritten Soul (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Raeanne Furfaro (8/15/2011 3:16:00 AM)

    Well written and very spiritual without being overtly so. I like the images of the lower path that is easier or a small effort for the higher path. I like the contrasts in the paths as well. Very well done and thought provoking. Thank you for sharing this. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Li Ying (7/30/2011 9:30:00 AM)

    Shall we choose the way below with instant pleasure?
    Leading down to a place of heat, we cannot measure (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 363 Points Rekha Mandagere (7/8/2011 1:23:00 AM)

    Life is a mixture of hard and soft ways. But one should make a right choice to tread in the shady way and must put efforts in that direction. Then God will surely help. Great message. Thanks (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 0 Points Mohammad Akmal Nazir (2/5/2011 11:35:00 AM)

    No, no we can't bear walking on the way which leads to inferno. We must strive for choosing God's way. And for this we have to be humble, cosiderate and straigh forward.
    Very deep poem.
    Excellent! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Leela Devi (11/30/2010 9:34:00 PM)

    theme-fundamental-CHOICE-when misplaced boomerang (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 86 Points Nivedita Bagchi SPC UK (8/29/2010 11:06:00 AM)

    ‘Just heat and sweat and more ennui’ ~ But one has to bear it

    ‘Somewhere deep inside we are aware’ ~ Yeah this awareness is self consciousness self slicing…

    ‘Shall we choose the way below with instant pleasure? ’ ~ Instant never Constant…

    Well best choice comes when mind is in balanced state …your poetry has very in-depth meaning …need contemplation… Thanks for sharing
    Regards
    Ms. Nivedita
    UK
    10/10 (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 4 Points Faeo Lyre Clive (6/23/2010 12:18:00 AM)

    'tis a questionable one of choices and the making.

    Well bred and rhymed into aabb ccdd eeff upon quatrains albeit without a regular rhythm.
    Draw on more! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Maria Shipka (6/22/2010 7:11:00 AM)

    Always when we are really enough perceptively and carefully listen our inner voice, we can find the best navigator for our Earthly wandering (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Yoonoos Peerbocus (6/16/2010 1:37:00 AM)

    [somewhere deep inside we are aware that the way up...God's way]------the inner life is the true world independent of material balance sheet/and comfort/fine (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Lynn Glover (6/14/2010 12:52:00 PM)

    Easy choice here, go up to the shade where God lives and I will rest with him forevermore. A very good write. Lynn (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 44 Points Malaya Roses (6/11/2010 1:28:00 AM)

    Evil within ourselves sometimes will lead us to disasterous consequence. Women become helpless, men walk beyond morale and boundries of humanity.
    to reach this kind of self realization, sometimes we have to go thru hell and come back to earth with rivers of tears and regret.
    Nice poem and it's shall provoc mind- soberness.
    10+ for this poem. (Report) Reply

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