Presence Poem by sunnetra basu

Presence

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The lantern was pre-lit,
dusky dawn on the glass-
the smoke turns in and out,
the burnt breath let that pass
I was in the middle of nothing,
the magic lantern burns slow but deep
Twisting the telescope at night
I see the star behind the cloud weep
All night long, the bell didn't ring,
The pathway between hearts didn't swing
I didn't hear a knock,
Nobody said, tell them I came,
But I waited, as the darkness emblame.
Silent moments were burning,
I felt, the smoke filled the smell of your breath.

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
R.k Das 27 March 2012

the presence of 'PRESENCE' is so emphatic, , difficult not to get the smell in teh dusky room where the lantern in effinate flicker makes its presence visible by teh seeing eyes of the poet, , it is difficult to bear so much of reality in this poem, it hurts, , really hurts, , , but thanx a lot, , , yr imagery is so very powerful, , , omg

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Dave Walker 27 March 2012

Like it, a great poem. May i invite you to read my new poem called, Flow Of Hate.

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