Pretty old man age
beyond his ways
Flame like streaks
around his face
Wakes up each day
with a crimson face
Resumes routines
round domain
Rides in cart drawn
by mares unseen,
Seven shade face
theirs single seen...
20 10 08
this is brilliant, you were right-I did like it.
Short and beautiful. A different and novel perception, wonderfully written. Thank you.
Great observation, imagination and simple but amazing depiction... Brilliant pieice... Sincerely, Kamran
Wonderful piece, and what would we do if he did not awake each day to smile on us...........10
resumes routine round domain...never a bored sun...lovely write sir...10
the theme and your use of the right amount of words makes this poem a memorable one....picturizing the sun as the 'old man' expresses how one should respect this life sustaining source....very nice...
The poem is so amazing in its beauty which is its simplicity. What a great way to picturise sun....wonderful u deserve a perfect10 for this. Thanks for the beautiful experience.
mattullavarkkaay swayam kathiyeriyunna susnehamoorthiyaam sooryaaa...
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
Thank you for your comments on my poem image. as a learned and deep thought ful you writ good. i read some of yours all abscre.