Longevity Suffocates and can be too mucH
Omitted less easily, the repeated small stigmA
Vexing even the most forgiving, patient hearT
Eroding loves foundations with roots of hatE
This poem is more than just a clever setup (which has inspired me by the way-if only I had your wit!) it is also written beautifully and conveys so much in four short lines. Excellent write-lovely read!
It's strange there's only a one letter difference between hate and heart; fiend and friend. This poems looks a little into why that is or rather, why they really can be that close and blurred. Nice sort of nugget insight that's good to have in the morning to think through it during the day. -M
Very deep. Bravo In very fEw Amazing words yoU have Told a great thought. I love the way you ended each line and the last letters make the theme of your poem. FabULous Great Work
Its bcaz men and women didnt created in that patter what we see...... All these are man(ofcourse women too) institutions and perceptions.... It has to be turned like this...... Sorry but its true..... Lets liberate our tender hearts from so called cultural bonds.. a subjected can be penned in millions words.... Like it
You write so well of this scary emotion. I love what Mark said too xxx So many of my favourite writers gather in the comments of your poetry. It's delightful xxx
Love this poem and what it says...and oh, how true it can be....unfortunately. How clever of you to set it up the way you did....shows imagination! ! ! and I never realized what Mark had to say, about the one letter differences in those words! ! ! ! ! Excellent poem said in such short form. Thanks for it.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
Great format Stevie, and it does happen doesn't it.