~ Rupturing Hymen [a.K.A. Defloration] ~ Poem by MS. NIVEDITA BAGCHI SPC. UK.

~ Rupturing Hymen [a.K.A. Defloration] ~

Rating: 3.2


Candle light oscillating
Luxing like amoeba
Silenced to actuate
Jus Primae Noctis
Poor just married Dona
Lying like log to
Endure engulf forced
Somatic n' psychic
Defloration harpooning
It's bonking by law. [Shame]


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Mod day's scoundrels'
Anti-social virile DNA
Actively augmented by
Vile androgenic vaccine
As it's still necessary
For lustful male flocks
Law books read
Its rape unlawful [Odium]


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Psychic and somatic
Hymen stay traumatized
Galvanized stigma
Guaranteed to Dona to
Bear blaster blister rest of life.


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Has 21st century civilization
Progressed a pico centimeter
From maleficent medieval
Septicemic scenario?


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What next __niv guesses
For sure atavistic retrograde
Evolution [read civilization] to
Medieval malevolency.


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Hi men for hymen assault
niv spits on cruddy civilization
Hey all join in mass spitting
Kicking whapping bashing on
Twin balls [OO] of live carnal cadaver
As Poet Taslima Nasrin* did
On this de-civilized society


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Glossary: Humbly given for what I tried to express: ~

[1] Jus Primae Noctis [Latin]: Right of first night [It refers to the medieval belief that the Lord of the manor had the right to have sex].
[2] Bonking: [Brit] Have sexual intercourse
[3] Odium: Hate coupled with disgust.
[4] Pico: One trillionth.
[5] Atavistic: Characteristic of an atavist [An organism that has the characteristics of a more primitive type of that organism].
[6] Cruddy: Characterized by obscenity.
[7] Whapping: Hit hard
[8] Carnal: Marked by the appetites and passions of the body.

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*Poet Taslima Nasrin: Exiled Female Poet from Bangladesh

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POET'S NOTES ABOUT THE POEM
~ RUPTURING HYMEN [a.k.a. DEFLORATION] ~
Ms. Nivedita
UK
July 17,2012

[Every comment is a nail to coffin
of rape psyche __ please unbolt ~ niv]


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COMMENTS OF THE POEM
John Raubenheimer 20 November 2012

Prateep, below, might be right. (Is might always right?) Nivedita your poems are quite hard to read sympathetically - though I agree that rape is an abomination. Have mercy on your readers - someone gave me this particularly good piece of advice. Sad but true: people read mostly for pleasure. If there is no pleasure in the reading - and I must temper this by saying some of your wordplay tickles me - people won't want to read your poems. Please don't think I am the enemy here. I believe you have a good heart and are trying to say something worthwhile. And I thank you.

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A vast poem on devastating danger to women...moral recession pulling us in to fathomless abyss and it'll go on...unless moral sanitization is deployed...great message to society as an 'come awake' call...bold enough..fire works of vocab and aptly juxtaposed...congrats Nivedita for your high decibel stand....for courage max 10++

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Bk Therealist 24 July 2012

Great poem. Tone down on the vocab though.

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Ekaterina M. Polischuk 24 July 2012

grate poem, i really like it and enjoyed while reading.

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Iniduo Iniduo 26 July 2012

Your poem is a very graphic outcry, no discussion about the content. I wonder if the poem would be more persuasive with more emphasis on the words not spoken, now it has a hint of a pamflet rather than the finesse of a poem. I hope you don’t mind, we can only gain by honest comments and since you asked me to…. Thanks for sharing.

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Whisperkwane Lamb 11 October 2015

The rise and fall of (mount) ...O...Lips...pus...minds...know not...fear...nor pleasure...for emotion of need and need... the higher plane see...the turnnel version of...pleasure in life...forgetting that was (THE) resting place of life...I love you for sharing what is a world genocide for the personal garden...of fresh flowers...my hat off to you/Nivedta...germaine greer...a woman like yourself...

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Dale Mullock 26 December 2012

Hmm quite a lustral of the old way is presented and the poor devirgination of a beautiful flower unready to be plucked from the moist soil... the demons from the apiary have been pollinating poor polly! ! ! Jus Primae Noctis! ? Hmm is that not the old medieval right of the lord of the manor to sleep with the bride of his servants and peasants? Do such things still exist in the civilised world? I ruddy well hope not? ? ! ! ! Very powerful poetic piece this with coitus quiddity thrown in to make us stop and think about man and woman, rank, society and how peevish the world can be in its fickle existence of the humanity that it sustains. Previous pervious natures will be banned from future civilisations? Damned lustful animals will make sure that it won't be! ! ! Sort them out Niv!

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Satbir Bakshi 16 December 2012

dear poet why it is referred to as defloration? Good old Niv - original as usual and vehemently vocal in most tribes the bridal bedsheet is displayed next morning signifying the culmination of this primal ritual that causes life long scars- there has to be a more civilised way to do this unholy act warm regards ss bakshi

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Satbir Bakshi 16 December 2012

dear poet why it is referred to as defloration? Good old Niv - original as usual and vehemently vocal in most tribes the bridal bedsheet is displayed next morning signifying the culmination of this primal ritual that causes life long scars- there has to be a more civilised way to do this unholy act warm regards ss bakshi

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Amitabha Bagchi 13 December 2012

======================================== ** ORIGINAL MESSAGE ******************** ======================================== From: Susanta Pattnayak To: Nivedita [poet Under Threat Of Editorial Cannibalism Date-Time: 9/24/2012 10: 02: 00 AM (GMT -6: 00) Subject: Re: Re: Re: RUPTURING HYMEN [a.k.a. DEFLORATION] ~ niv ~ UK ---------- I like the poem and the thought put behind every word of the poem. I like it in more than one way...Well written, very impressive, very different and a very powerful voice...I'd love to join the band-wagon of 'mass spiting'.. and i don't know.. if 'Kicking whapping bashing on Twin balls [OO]' are the only (and the only) option left to end the perversity.. Yes I'm with it too! Regards, Susanta Dear Nivedita (niv) , In reply to your message, I cite one of my poems written on a similar context. ' Unzipped lips unsealed tongue profound the truth likewise profuse the love. Kiss her nifty lips, truthfully, without pretension and relish the divinity. Say honestly, without awe Your word, to the world you ought to say and never hold but applaud, that is nicely and wisely said. ' Regards Susanta. == == Posted thru courtesy of AB London n

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