Silently watching
are you
aware
that im here
that i am waiting
and debating
words i could say,
but my hands reached out
to god
Silently watching
wondering
if you
think the same
or maybe you think,
that all this silent watching
is very lame
Silently watching
i can silently assume
that your thinking the same
im so close
yet again so far away
i have to
come up with the words to say
Silently watching
waiting
for god to answer,
but i dont want
to push fait
until that date
i
will be
silently watching...
Soft and vivid words flow nicely in a free form verses....though there is a typographical error in it i think it shld be FAITH i guess. ----- Either way love of country or love of man, awareness is most likely to perceived. a 10.
Aden, do you have anyidea what a real poet is? A real poet is someone who can take an idea, like Silent Watcher, and make it flow evenly in free verse. Just because you aren't published, and just because you aren't the poet laureate, does not mean you are not a poet. When we walk down the street, or sit on our balcony porches, we are silently watching life go by, while we just relax. This is a very well written free verse poem, and has a message for the reader, if only the reader is wise enough to grasp it. I am a silent watcher too of all that flashes before me in this looming endless battle we call life. And what conclusions do I come to from my silent watching? That is what my poems and stroies are all about. Thank you for sharing, and I am giving you a 10 for this. And yes Aden, you are a 'real' poet. Hugs, Barbara
This is a great Job Aden. Thanks for sharing. very smoothly written. I enjoyed reading it.
Silently watching i can silently assume ...................................... Remarkable, mysterious poems////10/// Kindeat regards, Tsira
Excellent portrayal of the theme. Your mind seems mature than your age.
Interesting. it makes you wonder as to who you are talking about. only thing i suggest is rhyming sequence should maybe be slightly altered other then that very powerful and moving! good work!
Great Lines Loved the Last Lines the Most Silence is the Hardest Act to learn.... Being Silent Does not mean that we dont know about what is around us But it means..That what is Around us Does Not worth the Words
this is a space catching poem....beautifully written........
Angels are all ways watching until you ask for their help.'I send my angels to guide and protect you lest you stumble against a stone' paraphrased from one of the psalms.Good poem.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
ADEN, YOU HAVE TALENT AT WORK/IN THE WORKS. KEEP IT UP. AS TO STANDING BY WATCHING, WHAT IS THE WORD MOST OFTEN OFFERED AS A REMEDY? ACT, I BELIEVE. DON'T LET FEAR OR INSECURITY KEEP YOU FROM ATTAINING YOUR DESIRES/YOUR GOALS. NICE INTROSPECTIVE POEM. OH, AND, YES, THE OBJECT, THE SUBJECT OF YOUR SCRUTINY MAY BE HOPING THAT YOU'LL STEP FORWARD AND BREAK THE SILENCE...THANKS FOR SHARING, CAROL