Stable And Sure Poem by Mehta Hasmukh Amathaal

Stable And Sure

Rating: 5.0


Yes no one may support
As the ship has to be taken to port
Not only safely but in worthy condition
And there needs to be no more confusion

Elders may want their children
To excel in the field and remain self driven
With all advice freely available
To come out safely from troubles

The children specially find it difficult
They feel even amused with insult
Why do they scoff at each turn?
They think seriously when return home

“Do not do this do not do that”
“Be careful you are growing fat”
“See the bones in body for easy count”
Such things increase worry and mount pressure

In real practice it is quiet contrary
Some of the advice are unnecessary
As rivers do take their own course
The children too think right or wrong of course

They need to be pointed out
About known dangers and talked about
Some of things may need well exposure
To make their life stable and sure

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal 06 March 2014

Excellent Piusha Singh7 hours ago I can feel the emotions in your thoughts, beautifully crafted, Mehta ji.Keep flowing! ! Comment +1

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Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal 06 March 2014

great Faith Deangelis12 hours ago nice Comment +1

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Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal 06 March 2014

Needs a lil more focus and rewrite; ; ; it could be really great; tweak this more! Denise Childress17 minutes ago this could be really GOOD and actually AWESOME.....just tweak it some more? more focus? go deeper?

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Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal 05 March 2014

great Faith Deangelis16 minutes ago nice

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Vadali, Dist: - sabarkantha, Gujarat, India
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