Still Working Fine.. Poem by Abhijit Surve

Still Working Fine..

Rating: 5.0


Everything around is in a slow motion,
Laziness is now a prominent emotion..
The mood surrounding is seemingly low,
Time in my watch too is ticking slow..

The air is dull and the day is boring,
Being half asleep, I am almost snoring..
Everyday is the same, there's nothing new,
I am cynical of following this routine too..

Ages have passed and still many pending,
It feels to me this day is never ending..
Thought of taking a walk for a while,
But every step I take feels like a mile..

Not an ounce of energy to boost my mood,
Tried to vitalize in every way I could..
Having lost all the vigor, I had in store,
A change for good isn't happening anymore..

My body too has lost all remaining momentum,
Like a mannequin on my desk, in my sanctum..
Laying on my chair with an impassive face,
Even a blink of an eye, is hard to trace..

Pessimistic thoughts are troubling my mind,
Even a pinch of optimism is hard to find..
Strangely enough, in such a dreadful time,
I have tuned my words, I am able to rhyme..

Written in every verse, is simply what i feel,
How easily could I manage this without a zeal..
Assonance is created by scripting every line,
Yes! ! The poet inside me is still working fine..

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Deborah Cromer 07 August 2009

Yes! The poet inside you is working fine! Nice piece of rhyme. When all else fails and you can do nothing...A good poet can always rhyme. :) Good set of mood and feeling in this poem. You have written it in a good informative way, but still leave it as entertaining. too. Nice combination of words and thoughts. You put them together very well. Deborah Cromer

0 0 Reply
Surya . 09 August 2009

the poet inside is still working. that was good news.it will revitalise you. voted your first 10 surya

0 0 Reply
Maitreyee Joshi 08 August 2009

good to know that the poetic part of you is still in its zealous mood.thanks

0 0 Reply
Lady Grace 07 August 2009

well done..rhyming words are alsways nice to read..nice to know that u r srill working fine..owww..take care....cheers..

0 0 Reply
Obinna Eruchie 07 August 2009

Not easy to go through that as a poet, the important thing in writing is that one is 'Still working fine'. Well penned with a lovely theme.

0 0 Reply
Ted M 07 August 2009

Sometimes you feel you are not productive enough. I suppose there are times, the mind and the body don't yield. Nice piece full of rhyme............

0 0 Reply
READ THIS POEM IN OTHER LANGUAGES
Close
Error Success