There is no point in asking(what if)
After you jump off the Cliff
Falling..
Million eyes Would stare
But no heart would Stop to Care
Falling..
Now you ask(couldn't I bare?)
Wondering while you get stabbed by Air
Falling....
Wide eyed You see your Fate
Rigid heart, It's too late
So, you're falling
You'll hit the Ground
And Your Hopeless Voice
Forever will be Gone
Sarah Ibrahim ©
Think before you act...a good message this poem gives through elegantly framed lines...a ten for you Sarah
Sacrificial Suicide crucified, feel the wrath of suicide fear of the sphere, angel darkness disappears Covenant, blasphemous, open up unholyness lord, let him just just with his unholy sins Suicide sacrifice Destruction of life Blood of knife or or FALLING Insane blasphemous dear poet i like this poem, but if u talking about the Suicide try to use like that words well done
BETTER TO DIE THAN TO CRY OVER SPILT MILK BE DARING BE HONEST AND THE THOUGHT OF DEATH IS THE BIGGEST TESTING POINT as i sensed from ur poem!
Can I support this type of poem? Only for the ends of literature? Anyway nicely composed.
Nobody could take a 10, in such poems which are hard and difficult to handle and then conclude.I give you 9+, because you handle it cleverly. You put the question before the act (what if) , the cold facts (no heart would Stop to Care) , the self critisism (couldn't I bare?) , the hopeless end (your Fate, Rigid heart, It's too late) . Joseph Josephides Member of the International Society of Poets (ISP) Intern.Library of Poetry awarded
This poem is a really good suicide peom, it's not like most of the othes this is a more think before you act, I like that. And thanks for commenting my peoms too!
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
Deep and dark but also good the ending could be improved but overall its great