The Saddest Line's I Write At Night Poem by James McLain

James McLain

James McLain

From Tampa Florida And Still Living Near By

The Saddest Line's I Write At Night

Rating: 5.0


The only flower left and I.
One fur trapper, hungry and in need, crosses over.
And the winding, shallow creek.
Being heavy, Is it thus?
And when it by it comes when two are touched?
Seasons pass, It ends like this, entirely.
The water by you warm it blows.
Falling leaves float by this,
and changing winds to laughter, lost in this, has been.
Feelings falling petals from the sky.
Japan and China.
And after, frost comes snow it dances, as it melts
and then it comes it must again.
Gestures from the hand and loveliness.
Watching I the waves from which you wander there about.
The glory to his which she leaves behind are blinding white.
And has it not been cut of it, thereoff, of all it's luster,
width and standing under is the night, it shines with peace
and which if known were gathered softly up.
By all whom come, too know it now.
When it water flows to all whom know, rushing by you.

Wednesday, October 30, 2019
Topic(s) of this poem: night,write
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Bri Edwards 08 November 2019

line 5: " ..And when it by it comes " ? ? this i like (and some other lines) : " And after, frost comes snow it dances, as it melts" I've shared this with my wife. both of us think parts (many parts perhaps) sound 'nice', but there is disjointedness and maybe some symbolism we do not understand. And she thinks you could use some more lines to make the current lines more understandable. bri :)

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Your wonderful poem 04 November 2019

Feeling falling petals from the blue of sky when the sweet springs die and the offsprings cry. Is IT love? you and.........your poem inspired me, dear friend.

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Dr Dillip K Swain 30 October 2019

A wonderful poem! Beautifully composed......10/10

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James McLain

James McLain

From Tampa Florida And Still Living Near By
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