'The Sense Of Smell' Poem by Whitney Nicole Albright*

'The Sense Of Smell'

Rating: 4.5


In a sense, it’s not the heart or the mind
That triggers memories so deeply confined
They only play a common role
In those mad moments that flood the soul
Vision and hearing have their tales
But I think the detonation’s due to…smell
That’s what I said, yet you probably oppose
That most of our memories come from the nose
The reason I hold this strong conclusion
Is because my smell brought on so many illusions
Walking outside, I encountered a breath of fresh air
And memories exploded, memories flared;
On the mountains on a day so breezy
On the beach with the tide uneasy
Opening a window during a clashing storm
Sitting by the fire in hopes to get warm
A doe swimming across the river brim
A prickly pine come falling from a limb
Playing in raked leaves in mid fall
Gathering a horse back into his stall
Drip drying in the summer wind
Chasing lightning bugs with my friend
Looking at the stars, oh what bliss
A little boy and a first kiss
Going to a baseball game in night fog
How the rocks roll during a jog
Knowing grass has just been mowed
Making an angel in the snow
A vision of a tire swing under a maple
A candle lit Christmas dinner table
Watching flowers sway on tops of hills
Remembering how God's love feels
Volcanic memories explode and then again swell
Memories are pure madness when encountering a smell

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Bonnie Collins 27 December 2008

Enjoyed this very much as you have captured a vivid picture and your imagery takes the reader along with you in your memories, and yes, the nose is part of our memory, the aroma... That is why smelling pumpkin pie, apple pie ect will remind many of us of home, and of course cologne will always remind you of the person who wore it. Bonnie

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Marama Kelly 26 December 2008

Thanks for sharing your thoughts, view and concept. So far this has been the best I have read that is well worded, well expressed, the imagery and message within is structured and forms well, with a good flow and rhythmn from beginning to end. Hope you don't mind though, did find a couple of errors that could do with a bit of a tweak. The first three words, seem vague. Could it be 'In a sense...' In line 16, you have 'Sitting by the fire wood in hopes of getting warm' In this you would not need the word 'wood', unless it is the smell of wood you want to emphasise. In that case the whole line would need a revision as firewood (one word) does not get you warm, the fire does. Line 18, you have 'A pricky pine comb falling from a limb' suggest 'A prickly pine cone falling from a limb' Apart from that, well done and many blessings to you

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