Time's Warning Poem by Floyd Zimmerman

Time's Warning

Rating: 4.3


I'll smash your back
I'll weaken your bones

I'll bury your lovers
To rot in the earth

I'll take your sons
Where they cannot be reached

I'll make your daughter
Rip her knickers down

I'll leave you alone
To collect memories

Then i'll take them too
And i'll be what's left

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
C. P. Sharma 25 August 2009

Peace, my dear. why all this wrath! ! ! ! ! ! ! Why envy, it will die its own death, CP

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Paige Merrill 25 August 2009

Wow that was brilliant. All great poems stem from strong emotions. I'm presuming your strongest emotion was anger. Did a family member die, you don't have to answer if that's too personal, I'm just curious!

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Sulaiman Mohd Yusof 26 August 2009

You too will be left rotten to death cuz you just cannot grab the past in order to redeem the future, the fault line that seperates human from Angel or even God.

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Angelic Warrior 26 August 2009

i'm hoping your talking about time and not yourself......anger is not a good emotion....over time it grows and can eat away at the soul.....kind of creepy but well done

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Jen Capaldi 27 August 2009

much darker than your other poems. well written nonetheless. but much darker. i hope whatever caused they beauty of your poems to turn so dark is not here to stay my dear Floyd. Jen

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Floyd Zimmerman 12 September 2009

As she gets older she will become more independant/ sexually active etc. Slowly becoming her own woman and flying the nest.

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Paul Hansford 12 September 2009

As in Green Soldiers, the symbolism eludes me. Why would Time 'make your daughter / rip her knickers down'? The last 2 couplets are quite chilling though.

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Philosophy of a DewyFlower 03 September 2009

a brutal revanche stem from the heart of a sensitive poet. an indignant poem! PeaCE.

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James Mclain 30 August 2009

and the smoke.. wraps sweet..tendrils.. around my face.. as this dance..resumes.. the frantic pace...in deed.. that is left to me... as my steeds fly back to score out the heart....iip

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Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal 28 August 2009

I'll leave you alone To collect memories Then i'll take them too And i'll be what's left..no harsh words are expected form genleman poet.. eventhought should not occure in your mind while writing peaceful messages. you may beburing within, but u should have double faced message. one to retain and anotehr to deliever. this you could do clevdrly but u hve failed to do it.....10 read mine revenge... i am disgrace

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