I left you simmering, surface Undulation
Mustn't boil over, refrain
A 'burn in hell' type revelation
My conscience turned off the flame
How could something barely amalgamated
Meal uneaten, Luke warm
Leave my heart this strangulated
Aching, throbbing, torn.
Second stanza is amazing. Raw emotion and truth expressed eloquently throughout though (barely amalgamated, strangulated) . Also love the metaphor of an uneaten meal. It's universally appealing/understood. Going on my favorites list.
I LOVED this! The general feeling portrayed: heartache. I feeling I know well. You did and outstanding job at capturing that in this poem in a very raw way. And in harmony Thomas the heart wants what he heart wants....even what is worst for it'
Wonderful expressions! Great comparison! Leaves the heart aching, throbbing and torn! !
Oooooh this has left me pondering and prosing. I love well thought out wording and the rawness to it. I would tell you my favourite part but I wouldn't know what to choose-the whole thing is amazing. It's reflective, wise and painful all at once-as memories often are.
Stevie, Just read this... And I love it of course... it's inner-meaning, has my head all abuzz... -a momentery lasp in judgment? -a regrettable indiscretion perhaps... no matter, Loving your metaphoric revelations! Great Ink Stevie! ; -) -Kelly.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
Awesome. Beautiful expression, nice flow and rhyme