SUN
Right overhead
A flaming Frisbee
Glowing, burning and searing
Citreous
MOON
Radiant princess
In jewelled diadem
Escorted by starry entourage
Regal
Both have been made dearer still.... the teeming of words unique in each line has made the Cinquains brilliant. But the twins are diametrically polar and are born to different parents, I assume..
this great universe is ours to behold. expressed so well. good cinquains
Of course Sun is a flaming Frisbee that glows with yellow color and moon is radiant princess In jewelled diadem. Beautiful twin Cinquains on Sun and Moon are well executed. Thank you a lot.10
beautiful description with carefully chosen words, minimalist! I have one reservation-if the sun is right overhead, it is likely to be bright white.The citreous or orange color is seen in the evening when the sun is about to set.It has something to do with scattering of light by the atmosphere.
Wonderful word Cinquains on the SUN n Moon! The more I write it seems my response isn't accepted. Hence the curtailment, Valsa!
The Sun and Moon described with the most beautiful words. One can just imagine the majestic view of these two wonderful planets described in all its glory and splendor. You did this very well Valsa.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
The sun and the moon beautifully pictured. Now you have to write cinquains about all the other planets!