Wilting Life Poem by Leah Ayliffe

Wilting Life

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To wander in the distance, over a petal of a rose
In deep thought of what has been
Or what has not
Drifting in an ocean that hugs earths’ surface for eternity
The mind of the heart, the heart that has bled
The colour of the moon and stars
What was holy is not sacred or valued now
Untamed and wild, the nature of the seed that grows
The weeds of dandelions reach for the sun
And cry in the night
Swaying with the wind that blows furiously
Rocking back and forth like a cradle
Whispers of a dream which echoes in the breeze
But the silence leaves the air dead
Lift it from the root and discard of the remains
As the sea carries the soul violently to a new world
Yet before its death did seeds take flight
Landing in a vast field; creating new life
a slave for eternity to the sun

Thursday, January 13, 2011
Topic(s) of this poem: life
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Sandra Feldman 30 January 2015

So very deep. Touches all the Mystery of existence and wants to leap at the encounter of the unknown. To discover the very throne, the Sun giver and preserver of Life. Questioning our history, our eternity, perhaps. Excellent piece, to be reads slowly, many times. Unusually rich.

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Phyllis Strong 30 January 2015

What was holy is not sacred or valued now. I agree with you, well said.

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Lyn Paul 30 January 2015

The weeds of the dandelions reach for the sun And cry in the night A picture captured so well. Thank you

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Kim Barney 30 January 2015

Very profound. As Sandra Feldman said below, it needs to be read and savored slowly to be able to absorb all the meaning.

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Jagdish Singh Ramána 11 January 2019

beautiful creation! nature love and diction are lovely, the professional wanderer. you may like to read my poems. thank you

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Unnikrishnan E S 04 May 2016

Hi Leah, Beautiful poem; touching the heart. The weeds of dandelions reach for the sun and cry in the night.. The lines brings out the agony of 'a slave for eternity'. Great. Keep writing.

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Ernest Makuakua 27 January 2016

But the silence leaves the air dead Lift it from the root and discard of the remains As the sea carries the soul violently to a new world Yet before its death did seeds take flight Landing in a vast field; creating new life a slave for eternity to the sun im inspired thank you and keep writing

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Robert Rumery 22 January 2016

Very deep! I like it! !

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Daniel Brick 27 February 2015

A living being is born to be a slave of the sun. In SUNDAY MORNING Wallace Stevens came to the same conclusion. He ends with the line WE LIVE IN AN OLD CHAOS OF THE SUN, and then he gives us five images from nature, the instinctual, repetitive, non rational patterns of nature. And it's very consoling because of the inevitability he portrays, we surrender to it. Your poem has quiet and inevitability, but you don't readily surrender. There's a resistance in your poem as if you're asking IS THIS ALL THERE IS? NO, THERE MUST BE SOMETHING MORE! And if there is, you're alert, you'll find it. The language of this poem is wonderful, the multiple tones, just pitch perfect.

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