I was 9 days clean of you
I washed myself free of you
I burned your name away from my parting lips
I chopped you from my hair with brash clips
And the shaking starts in short tempers
And I quiver and gag as my body remembers
The feeling of yours in the same room
And my legs jerk as I rip your stiches from this loom
And I stretch myself across a busy highway
And ask to be pulverized as I lay
And I wonder how long it will take to erase
The mark my body leaves on this place
So it breaks my bones and sends me back to your clutch
A cripple, leaning on this crutch
I was 9 days clean of you
But I'll never really be free of you...
The second and third stanzas are my favorite. This reads to me as a Striking description of a deeply emotional battle. This poem really makes an impact. 'And the shaking starts in short tempers.' That's how it always a starts, isn't it? Stitches being ripped from a loom is clever. Also especially enjoyed: 'I wonder how long it will take to erase the mark my body leaves on this place.'
a great powerful poem.....lovely short influential stanzas and words......great description of how difficult it is to forget someone...
But I'll never really be free of you... This is really sad, especially as the imagery you use is so bold and vivid. The way you've written it is amazing though, its the essence of the relationship put into words; i's amazing.
This is Amazing. I can relate to it like most people. I really like the line 'I burned your name away from my parting lips, ' it's very visual & I can almost feel the burn. I am going to have to read your other work!
Wow this poem sent chills down my spine it was so good! It was intense, honest, and had great imagery. I don't have a favorite line because I loved it all! Good job
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
This was a very powerful poem.....my favorite part are the last two lines....its an honest realization