Musfiq us shaleheen

Silver Star - 3,336 Points (31st, December,1970 / Khulna, Bangladesh)

An Untold Love - Poem by Musfiq us shaleheen

Vitreous shinning of moon,
as springtime mothers pique
A train carried me from dark to light,
a rose bud bloomed-

I grasp roses and devotion songs together,
hands with my dreamed darling boon,
A dream decided real, never forgotten,
meaning of love as moonlit, learned from thy

Now onward-
Narrow uneven path,
Aye passionate pain stressed,
Thee roses faded and wither,
As a missing melancholy song-

On a full moon I bide on a boat for thy
Until ache twilight horizon-
Behind apart from time-
A mature pensive ripened,
An abstract passion craved for romance

Oh! It's beyond the wording,
Oh! My darling-
Oh! I forever behold thy
oh! ho! ! An untold love I feel! !

-Shaleheen,30th Decmber,2012

Topic(s) of this poem: love

Form: Prose Poem


Poet's Notes about The Poem

On a full moon I bide on a boat for thy
Until ache twilight horizon-
Behind apart from time-
A mature pensive ripened,
An abstract passion craved for romance

Comments about An Untold Love by Musfiq us shaleheen

  • Akhtar Jawad Akhtar Jawad (9/15/2014 8:32:00 PM)

    On a full moon I bide on a boat for thy
    Until ache twilight horizon-
    Behind apart from time-
    A mature pensive ripened,
    An abstract passion craved for romance
    Truly beautiful, a nice lovely poem, I have no alternate but to rate it 10 and include in my favorite poems. (Report) Reply

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  • Saiom Shriver (4/24/2013 2:34:00 PM)

    A train carried me from dark to light, can be compared to our teachers and parents who carry us back to Allah
    Your poem has great intensity (Report) Reply

  • Indranil Bhaduri Indranil Bhaduri (1/10/2013 12:20:00 AM)

    Romance.... I feel this is one of the best pieces I have read. (Report) Reply

  • Nader Baheri Nader Baheri (1/6/2013 2:19:00 AM)

    so romantically piece of art.
    now i think this love is told it is no more else untold.

    best

    ~nb
    . (Report) Reply

  • Jaya Mishra Jaya Mishra (1/4/2013 11:03:00 AM)

    So true....
    This is indeed an abstract poem craved for romance.
    The way you have put your words is so beautiful that it makes me feel beautiful about love....
    I loved this.... I actually did...! ! (Report) Reply

  • Jahan Zeb Jahan Zeb (1/4/2013 7:25:00 AM)

    That is one lovely piece dear. I liked the way you used your words. imaginative and poetic. Loved the flow of the poem and sweet sounds. Very well done (Report) Reply

  • Vivek Tiwari Vivek Tiwari (1/3/2013 8:14:00 PM)

    good piece of romantic poetry well expressed in superb imagery. Wish may your untold love have a louder and passionate echo to the silent ears of your love to make her know your intense love. (Report) Reply

  • Vipins Puthooran Vipins Puthooran (1/3/2013 2:47:00 PM)

    well- crafted images/ a romantic poem! ! ! (Report) Reply

  • Wahab Abdul Wahab Abdul (1/1/2013 7:44:00 AM)

    lovely poetry! i like it, , (Report) Reply

  • Shahriar Bobbie (1/1/2013 5:16:00 AM)

    yah, a good one and keep going on bhi-po (Report) Reply

  • Eleanor Leech Eleanor Leech (12/31/2012 5:16:00 PM)

    well written piece with a wonderful use of language (Report) Reply

  • Payal Parande (12/31/2012 10:08:00 AM)

    how beautiful...i have also written on the same topic, i don't know if had read it or not.....but really bravo sir (Report) Reply

  • Sallam Yassin Sallam Yassin (12/31/2012 9:24:00 AM)

    Romantic love
    hidden in your heart
    but it shine
    in every word of u
    thanks (Report) Reply

  • Xelam Kan™ Xelam Kan™ (12/31/2012 3:30:00 AM)

    images are crafted well but lack cohesion......
    poem must be well constructed... there must be a logical sequence among scene, lines and even feelings,
    no doubt you did it well but my humble wit expected more from your genius.....
    good effort.....keep penning and ponder,
    tnx dear (Report) Reply

  • Muhammad Mirash Muhammad Mirash (12/31/2012 2:49:00 AM)

    verry nice and romantic poem.moon is verry special for loving hearts, ever. (Report) Reply

  • Vishal Sharma Vishal Sharma (12/31/2012 2:23:00 AM)

    oh my god what a creation........i am dumbstruck...reading this.....hats off (Report) Reply

  • Sayeed Abubakar Sayeed Abubakar (12/31/2012 2:15:00 AM)

    Love is real. Your poem is real. Go on. (Report) Reply

  • Www. Poemhunter.com/m-d-dinesh-nair-2 (12/30/2012 9:58:00 PM)

    Well crafted in the mould of a passionate account given for appreciation of a great phase in love. The power of untold love is often more captivative... Thanks for inviting..I wish you too a very very Happy new year... (Report) Reply

  • Valerie Dohren Valerie Dohren (12/30/2012 3:36:00 PM)

    An untold love - very romantic and inspired write. (Report) Reply

  • Waseem A Malla Waseem A Malla (12/30/2012 2:24:00 PM)

    a great write indeed.. Keep up the good workkk (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Sunday, December 30, 2012

Poem Edited: Friday, April 17, 2015


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