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Asking You to Stay

if i keep

f
a
l
l
i
n
g

like this

i will slowly suffocate
when you become someone i miss

leaning over the

e
d
g
e

but keeping my feet on solid ground

wanting to leap into your ocean below
but i protect myself from being a casualty
-frightened to drown


afraid to slip
but wanting to
slowly

f
l
o
a
t

away

i'm petrified to tell you-
but every ounce of me needs you to stay


practicing for the ache
as you

d
r
i
f
t

further and further
from my waiting heart

i open my mouth to

s
p
e
a
k

but you're gone before i start


and you'll leave
see the world as it's

s
p
i
n
n
i
n
g

while i remain glued
caught in the wretched place you left me from the beginning

maybe you'll leave and keep me in your memory
maybe time will dissolve this day
i know that you need to leave
but i'm asking you to

s
t
a
y
.

Submitted: Friday, August 10, 2012
Edited: Friday, August 10, 2012


Comments about this poem (Asking You to Stay by Aria Siren )

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  • Yash Shinde (10/22/2012 7:58:00 AM)

    really explains the condition well..managed to capture the powerful feelings of your heart the condition of an aching heart....lovely

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  • Alla Simone (9/30/2012 5:16:00 PM)

    Leaning over the edge, but keeping my feet on solid ground. Wanting to leap into your ocean below, but i protect myself from being a casualty- frightened to drown. Afraid to slip, but wanting to slowly float away.
    Practicing for the ache as you drift further and further from my waiting heart.
    Those are my favorite lines. You've managed to capture the feeling of being painfully cautious quite well. Also: practicing for the ache as you drift...that line is a great illustration of such a common human tendency. Thanks for shaing.

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  • Tiger Lily Love (8/12/2012 5:46:00 PM)

    Wow another really good write! I could actually feel the ache in my chest as I read this. I know what it's like to want to tell somone to stay but be to afraid to say it.

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