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I am happy to return to Stone Age
Old intolerance ghost is out of cage
Hatred and violence continue to creates rage
Nothing can be written on simple page
We have not matured and grown with age
Hell bent on rampage and committing carnage
Under the disguise and show cleverly managed
All looked so orderly and meticulously arranged
Does religion permit or allow shaking of faith?
Is it so hollow that compels us to meet with death?
Do we urge more and find berth?
Religions are many or in fact there is no dearth,
Faith is not limited and not restricted to self
Confined to books and not retained in shelf
Spreading poison and venom across the holy land
Dirty game is on and seems to go out of hand
Kill the holy animals to inflame the passion
Coupled with Loot, fire, chaos, burning and arson
Still no grief at heart and appeal for peace
Meeting with persons for situations to ease
Where we are heading for and still waiting
Unruly scenes go on without check and un-abetting,
Situation is allowed to worsen and letting things go
Hitting us below the belt with no ice melting so
For ages we have remained different
Not acknowledging the weakness prevalent and inherent
All below the surface but not looking apparent
Not happened in past but raising head in current
We will not shed the difference and say
Not to surrender and no willingness to pray
Try to create hegemony and complete sway
Misguiding public opinion and carrying away
Let unruly rule the scene
Witness the destruction never before seen
No willingness on part or more so keen
Part of the game though actually not have been
Are we heading for disaster?
No one is there to control as master
World is moving with speed and closing faster
why we play the role as that of blaster
Have yet not crossed all the limits?
Do we not undermine His role and not submit?
Can not candle the light and lead the procession?
Show to world the correct path with cessation
Lot of damage has been done to malign humanity?
There is no useful purpose of its continuity?
You may see the reason in its futility
Life with change to find super quality
No need to go backing Old Stone Age
It is nothing but bondage and cage
We should not burn from with rage
Let us start with new resolve on page
hasmukh amathalal
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Monday, May 25, 2009 |
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Saturday, January 16, 2010 |
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Comments about this poem (Back to stone age
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Cheryl Griffith (2/1/2010 2:59:00 PM)
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I read a few of your poems. Your strike me as a tinker, you have the essence of a poet who sees the pain, hurts and issues that affects life, society and humanity as a whole and speak out about it in your poems. I especially like the first two stanza in Back to Stone Age. Your poems all have a particular rhythm which is good but become a bit singsong as it goes along. Also they tend to come across as just some words that rhyme because you focus on the rhyme more than anything. Look at poetic devices they can help your work. You have good potential
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bye bye... bye bye (12/12/2009 7:05:00 AM)
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I think it´s even worse! We are not back to Stone Age, we never left it!
Very well penned, it´s tragical that it needs to be written, though...
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Deodath Debideen (10/23/2009 8:51:00 PM)
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Very well scripted. Somebody is scripting DOOMSDAY. Yet, there is hope in this sad present.
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Mohammed Hassan (10/20/2009 11:30:00 AM)
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very beautiful poem i really like it
it's beautifully written 10
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Marieta Maglas (9/28/2009 1:29:00 PM)
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Let unruly rule the scene,
Witness the destruction never seen,
No willingness or more so keen,
But part of the game though actually not been
wonderful poem, very well written.........10
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Yacov Mitchenko (9/18/2009 10:56:00 PM)
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A few ideas present themselves here. First, you seem to be saying that, spiritually, we have not really evolved since the Stone Age. We have the same aggressive and violent tendencies. We're more dangerous now, given our sophisticated weapons and intellect. Religion is hollow now. We have many religious books, but they're either left unread, or if read, they don't ring true or resonate for many people. Religious leaders are mere politicians (perhaps they always were) .
Impersonality of technology is taking over. Once again, I would have liked more concreteness in the poem, but it was still a good read.
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Aiswarya. T.anish (9/18/2009 7:21:00 AM)
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Nice rhymes...loved it! Beautiful poem. Keep writing...
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Nikunj Sharma (8/16/2009 8:56:00 PM)
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True and hitting straight in heart. Marv ellous poem sir.pls read my 'in the name of religion'..
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