Manonton Dalan

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But My Eyes - Poem by Manonton Dalan

… twirling key
on my hand
reminds me
of you, gone
was like yesterday
in jungles full of honey
bees never bit me
but crawl all over
especially when
we are together
they sing melody

to my ears; it’s absolute beauty
even blue sky could envy
pouring her tears, rustling
on treetops, deafening
we end up running for shed
and end up to softness
of a bed.

how beautiful that was
i could feel my hands clasp
my eyes look up
but all is empty; but my eyes


Comments about But My Eyes by Manonton Dalan

  • (3/12/2016 8:01:00 PM)


    oooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooops! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! (Report) Reply

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  • (1/19/2016 2:12:00 AM)


    my eyes look up
    but all is empty; but my eyes

    and such excellence my my my
    (Report) Reply

  • Sofia Kioroglou (1/15/2016 11:33:00 AM)


    The best I have read today. As I told you yesterday, you have a unique poetic voice! I love your poetry! Congrats! (Report) Reply

  • Prince Obed de la Cruz (4/16/2011 11:13:00 AM)


    nice flow of lines.... smooth... simple and beautiful... nice poem... (Report) Reply

  • (5/24/2010 11:48:00 PM)


    nice poem, the beauty in ones eyes, the window to endless possibilities, good one: 0) (Report) Reply

  • (4/12/2010 6:38:00 AM)


    Nice poem 10/10 score i hope you will read my poems just keep writing more poems! (Report) Reply

  • (4/5/2010 12:50:00 PM)


    Beautiful poem, evocative use of nature - I enjoyed it. (Report) Reply

  • Palas Kumar Ray (4/5/2010 12:45:00 PM)


    I never knew memories were sooo sweet.Indeed a perfect pain-pleasure-pain situation.Love it. (Report) Reply

  • Kannan G (4/4/2010 11:50:00 AM)


    Your eyes go beyond the limits of sight. Beautiful lines. Best wishes. (Report) Reply

  • (4/2/2010 3:18:00 AM)


    Parting is such sweet sorrow and sure leaves the eyes drowning in tears a theme that happens so often...well said,
    regards
    (Report) Reply

  • (3/13/2010 3:13:00 PM)


    so good
    Especially you started the poem nicely
    (Report) Reply

  • Ashraful Musaddeq (5/12/2009 10:51:00 PM)


    My 10 for this wonderful composition.
    Love it.
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  • (1/24/2009 2:58:00 PM)


    Very beautiful poem :) very well written! 10++++ (Report) Reply

  • (11/10/2008 11:02:00 PM)


    all is empty, but my eyes..
    they keep on dreaming..
    of gorgeous sunrise...
    rest is lost among your words...
    like twirling stars around my world...
    (Report) Reply

  • Rm. Shanmugam Chettiar (10/20/2008 5:34:00 AM)


    A good love poem well emoted. you must give your biography for mental communication (Report) Reply

  • Palas Kumar Ray (10/14/2008 1:09:00 PM)


    All is empty but my eyes.
    HEARTBREAKING
    indeed.
    Love it.
    beyond marks.
    (Report) Reply

  • (10/14/2008 11:15:00 AM)


    nice and romantic with full of emotion, and edgy. Tess (Report) Reply

  • (10/11/2008 7:04:00 AM)


    This is really Beautiful and its really nice I really like this bit to my ears; it’s absolute beauty
    even blue sky could envy
    pouring her tears, rustling
    on treetops, deafening
    we end up running for shed
    and end up to softness
    of a bed
    (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Monday, October 6, 2008

Poem Edited: Monday, May 30, 2011


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