Naseer Ahmed Nasir

Rookie - 51 Points (April 01,1954 / Pakistan)

Climax Of A Long Story - Poem by Naseer Ahmed Nasir

She wrote me
On mud-walls
In colours delible
And then
Prayed for rain!

(1975, Translated By Dr. Satyapal Anand)

Comments about Climax Of A Long Story by Naseer Ahmed Nasir

  • Rookie - 12 Points premji premji (6/26/2009 5:36:00 AM)

    lovely write.............
    i still cherish your poem on peace........... (Report) Reply

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  • Rookie - 243 Points Palas Kumar Ray (5/10/2009 2:07:00 AM)

    And we never come to know what was written there for us. Lovely.
    True prayer remains invisible.
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  • Rookie Sonya Florentino (5/4/2009 9:12:00 PM)

    Wow, this says so much. So powerful.... I guess she had a change of heart! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 0 Points Lillian Thomas (5/4/2009 12:51:00 PM)

    A very fine little poem: an old story told in a fresh image. This is a jewel, both for the writer and the translator. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Cindy Kreiner Sera (5/4/2009 2:12:00 AM)

    Another excellent write - so typical of today when love and pain thereof is a passing game for some (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 0 Points Mamta Agarwal (5/2/2009 7:20:00 AM)

    its really a long story told in a few words. it evokes rural images i am so familiar with. tThe pain, transient nature of relationships, break up all expressed so vividly like a painting in words. In spite of myself I even smiled at your choice of metaphors...

    Mamta (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 246 Points Supriya Prathapan (5/2/2009 6:33:00 AM)

    Here probably u are talking about infidelity! How easily people forget each other. May be I'm wrong. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie ****tamara Hanaring.****** , A Thought Mate, (5/2/2009 1:43:00 AM)

    between the scent of the mud and the rain's beauty born a baby beautiful poem.. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 21 Points Moffat Mbuzi (4/28/2009 4:51:00 AM)

    I will write End of a long story. Good one (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 72 Points Akram Saqib (4/28/2009 3:09:00 AM)


  • Rookie Mel Vincent Basconcillo (4/28/2009 12:39:00 AM)

    the feelings on this poem are truly genuine and full of emotion! marvelous! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie nothing over (4/27/2009 12:36:00 AM)

    I liked the promptness of this poem and at the same time has alot of feeling (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Elaine Oxamendi Vicet (4/26/2009 9:23:00 AM)

    Climax or anti climax? At the end I feel more of the for thought here also. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 47 Points Meggie Gultiano (4/26/2009 2:47:00 AM)

    your long story was compressed and made it more great to read.Nice write (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 47 Points Meggie Gultiano (4/26/2009 2:46:00 AM)

    your long story was compressed and made it more great to read.Nice write (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Noel Horlanda (4/25/2009 3:41:00 AM)

    Great, great, great! A big's really a part and the end of a long story. A climax indeed. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Javier Garcia (4/23/2009 12:36:00 PM)

    this is genious.
    kind of heart breaking.
    i love it. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Chatara Conway (4/23/2009 12:09:00 PM)

    This is a nice poem, even though you used a few lines. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Catrina Heart (4/23/2009 5:50:00 AM)

    such an expressive poem, meaningful one! ! ! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 237 Points Kesav Easwaran (4/23/2009 4:37:00 AM)

    nice piece...vivid and expressive in few short lines...thanks, Naseer 10 (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Wednesday, April 22, 2009

Poem Edited: Thursday, May 7, 2009

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