Valerie Dohren

Silver Star - 3,241 Points (13 January 1947 / Southport)

Deliverance - Poem by Valerie Dohren

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Today, I slayed the devil!

I found him
skulking in his lair…

his eyes burning
like the fires of Mordor.

I put out the flames
with just one steely cold glance
stunning him into silence.

Then, I recited love poems
sang songs about peace and happiness
showed him images of starving children.

The tears streamed down my face like rain
falling upon the ground as a mighty flood
stained with the blood of a broken heart.

It was too much for him to bear -
he dropped onto his knees
and began writhing like a snake in the grass.

I scratched the sign of the cross upon his forehead
and washed away his number with my tears.

He became still – his face melted like Dali’s Stopwatch,
his dying breath issuing forth like an icy wind.

Today I slayed the devil …

The birds began to sing a sweeter song
than was ever heard before

and the sun shone brighter than has ever been known.

You will not see him again.
He has gone now – disintegrated into nothingness.

You may rest in your homes tonight
believing he is no more -

and dream of a brighter future …


Poet's Notes about The Poem

An allegorical poem about the age-old story of the triumph of good over evil.

Comments about Deliverance by Valerie Dohren

  • Freshman - 832 Points Om Chawla (8/29/2013 7:05:00 AM)

    Excellent portrayal of the theme of triumph of Good over Evil.
    How very different is the tenor of this poem from your earlier poem Through all My Five and Time spun Years where you wrote
    I have watched rich man take his fill
    The poor man falter in his wake....
    ..................................................
    But in the darker hours when spent
    That's when I have cried, O how I've cried, '
    Both the poems are reflective of your sensitivity and agony. (Report) Reply

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  • Veteran Poet - 1,143 Points Unwritten Soul (8/15/2013 7:13:00 AM)

    Good vs Evil...like water vs fire, and water always win...love will always defeat hate...let we be soldier of love! _Soul (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 1,229 Points Thomas A Robinson (8/10/2013 8:03:00 AM)

    We would all be devil slayers if we could. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 317 Points Nasarudheen Parameswaran (8/9/2013 6:54:00 AM)

    A very sharp social criticism.I love this defeat of worldly Satan. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 126 Points Kelvin Owusu (8/9/2013 2:32:00 AM)

    a bright poem love the imagery of the slayne of the devil, in the fight the devil never wins unless we let him (Report) Reply

  • Freshman - 613 Points Chandra Thiagarajan (8/8/2013 10:28:00 AM)

    Vivid imagery portrayed so well- Good will always win! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 35 Points Lucifera Santez (8/8/2013 9:46:00 AM)

    amazing, this is awesome.
    :) (Report) Reply

  • Freshman - 532 Points Juan Olivarez (8/7/2013 8:12:00 AM)

    Great poem. A departure from your usually admirable work. Just shows your true talent. I love the Tolkien inferrence (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 9,761 Points Heather Wilkins (8/6/2013 11:14:00 PM)

    a great write Val. glad he is out of the way (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 347 Points Danny Draper (8/6/2013 6:00:00 AM)

    A great yarn with good triumphing with some fine lines. Was he wearing a suite and was he one of the 1% that control the 90% of wealth and power over commerce, food, war, governments and poverty, if so we can a certainly sleep well. Well done. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 6,305 Points Tirupathi Chandrupatla (8/5/2013 2:09:00 PM)

    His face melted like Dali’s Stopwatch. Nicely said. A severe punishment indeed. Thank you. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 7,576 Points Neela Nath (8/5/2013 10:56:00 AM)

    A unique piece Val.Loved the reference of Salvadore Dali's painting (of the melted watch) ..Fabulous simile! You are genius! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Kevin Halls (8/5/2013 7:24:00 AM)

    Be great to pick up a paper and see the title: Val Doren has slain the Devil!
    Excellent poem though and like the Dali stopwatch line.
    But sadly as I tried to convey in my Daniel poem wickedness is everywhere. (Report) Reply

  • Freshman - 634 Points Sally Plumb Plumb (8/5/2013 1:12:00 AM)

    A really rivetting piece.... I felt quite excited the more I read.. (Report) Reply

  • Silver Star - 3,170 Points Lorraine Colon (8/4/2013 2:22:00 PM)

    Oh, Val, what took you so long? What an idea! If only it were possible. Great poem! (Report) Reply

  • Silver Star - 3,665 Points Dave Walker (8/4/2013 1:39:00 PM)

    Like it, to slay the devil, the way the world is at the minute
    you could have more to get rid of. A great poem. (Report) Reply

  • Bronze Star - 2,340 Points Smoky Hoss (8/4/2013 11:28:00 AM)

    Ah, I shall now rest at ease, and be able to soar through my dreams without fear. Thank you. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 295 Points Joseph Anderson (8/4/2013 10:37:00 AM)

    Certainly allegorical. When he returns let us hit him again. A brilliant concept, worth some thought (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 20,475 Points Valsa George (8/4/2013 6:34:00 AM)

    Kudos for the valour displayed, Val! So you have slain the devil and we can all sleep in peace! ! ! Hope he won't resurrect again! Great allegorical representation! (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Sunday, August 4, 2013

Poem Edited: Thursday, August 29, 2013


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