Fly Poem by ajith patnaik
Fly
this frustration that dwells in me,
its very hard for people to see.
long back i know who i was,
am now roaming without a cause.
i feel now very strange,
as people tell me that i did change.
i get tears when i sleep,
these sad feelings are jut too deep.
this character i see i cant play,
this misery is hard to say.
i feel i fell in a pit,
to get up i think am not fit.
i dont think i need anyone,
to help me out and have some fun.
it doesnt matter what it takes,
i'll surely get up and fly away.
i know i suck i dont know why,
thats sure because i didnt try'
i have confidence that i will fly,
watching everyone passing by.
am sorry if u think am buggin u,
these times i know not how to go through.
i will surely fight like a knight,
escaping the darkness and come to light.
i wont give up without a fight,
until my days start turning bright.
i will show the world how its done,
and tell them all that my name's no fun..
yes dont give up---you are great---good attempt for a first time write keep sharing +++++++10 regards anjali (do read my new ones)
You have the talent! Keep it up! Such a wonderful poem! -pink butterfly-
You have a great ability to put your innermost thoughts down on paper and reflect on them. Something that's not always easy to do. While much of your poem shows a, somewhat, negative self appraisal, the work turns out on a very positive note: i will surely fight like a knight, escaping the darkness and come to light. i wont give up without a fight, until my days start turning bright. I love it. A 10. Richard
Awesome! A great display of your poetic talent. You can juggle with words. Keep it up. CP
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
Delivering Poems Around The World
Poems are the property of their respective owners. All information has been reproduced here for educational and informational purposes to benefit site visitors, and is provided at no charge...
5/5/2024 12:43:45 AM # 1.0.0.1119
wow! impressive! the intensity is so strong that i could actually feel the emotions flowing through from a sad, depressed feelin to a furious voice then to a confident person...very well penned but i think poetry is all about the selection of words and although we have the freedom to choose any forms of words. short forms like 'u' and slangs like 'buggin' should be avoided at all times, unless, the poem is a non-formal one as in it is all about narration and if you intend to create a native poem. i hope you get what i mean but overall, i would give you a 9...well done!