~ Forgive My Absence! ~ Poem by MS. NIVEDITA BAGCHI SPC. UK.

~ Forgive My Absence! ~

Rating: 3.9


~ FORGIVE MY ABSENCE! ~
Ms. Nivedita
UK
10 March 10,2012


Forgive my absence!

Melting heart floats over floating algae
Discovers first pulsation of life in bounty braggy
Not in fugitive evanescing silence
But in serene cabalistic ambience.

Hope to be born with parlance
Nascent luminescence
Hold forbearance patience
I'll bloom n' blossom in elegance.

Your Excellency
Surrogate me in brilliancy
Play your capriccio cadence
In orphic esoteric effulgence.

Forgive my absence!


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Glossary: With humility glossary given for what I tried to express: ~
[1] Braggy: Exhibiting self-importance
[2] Evanescing: The property of giving off bubbles
[3] Cabalistic: Having a secret or hidden meaning
[4] Capriccio: An instrumental composition that doesn't adhere to rules for any specific musical form and is played with improvisation
[5] Orphic: Beyond ordinary understanding

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COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Annabel Cruz 10 March 2012

Hello Nivedita...you have asked for my opinion on your poem, so I will give it honestly, please take it as constructive criticism. Any time that you must add a glossary to your poem, then, surely, it means you are trying too hard to use words that you, yourself, have not mastered. Good poetry should be so effortless and clear, that no explanations should be necessary. Next time, paint the picture with your own words, so that all the world will understand the strength and depth of your emotions without the need of a glossary or dictionary. God Bless and keep trying....you have the heart and soul of a poet.

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Vipins Puthooran 11 March 2012

[I'll bloom n' blossom in elegance.] excellent.....top marks! ! !

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Very Poetic Come Back! We're missing you Ms. Niv...you need no surrogate I suppose.. 'Play your capriccio cadence In orphic esoteric effulgence.'...Out in out humbleness... readers' are Poets' propelling force..enjoyed much..tenner dr. spc

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Sharad Juneja 21 March 2012

hi nivedita it a was a pleasure read.... i rejoiced reading i t :)

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Katang Chakravorty 24 May 2012

'Your Excellency Surrogate me in brilliancy' ~ Since your Checkmate we're lovingly surrogating you and will be doing for your myriad mind-set in poetry Thanks for sharing

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Ken E Hall 01 May 2012

I forgive your absence I myself am always absent following my dream...dancing...now what was that guys name that said 'Absence makes the heart grow fonder we alls luv you...regards

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Shahzia Batool 10 April 2012

being a learner in the art of poetry, i 'd like to say a few things: thanks for helping the reader by adding glossary; if poetry is the universal language of every heart, it should be understood as well; secondly, there's a blend of the natural flow with the artistry of rhyming into couplet-form; thirdly it shook my confidence a little, because before this experience of reading your work, i never read a poem twice for comprehending it...i welcome it as a phase of new learning...thx a lot...

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Louis Cecile 02 April 2012

A wonderful piece from a gifted poet that I had wondered when she would return as a pieces delight. Your enjoyment with touching upon new words and descriptions are exciting as always. Very melodic piece, which conveys much that requires additional reading.

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Joub Kahuria 26 March 2012

Orphic: Beyond ordinary understanding thats all i can say.....amazing

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