So pure, white, cold,
solid to fingertips.
Warmth exudes his touch
but freezes on contact.
Breath expels vapour
as he sighs - 'Goodbye'.
Towards another lover
she embarks upon the night,
leaves refuse to scatter,
footfalls remain silent.
No words yet uttered
still he feels her kiss -
'So long, heated embrace,
I walk on...forever'.
The room suddenly heats.
He stands, again, alone.
25/5/08
Goodbye's are always hard....you have written this perfectly Viola, , lovely penning '10' from me. Best wishes Jon
Sometimes Goodbys arent always the answer, but in any case are so difficult to endure.. This captures the readers heart with empathy and feels each and every lonly moment ahead....... Bonnie
Wonderful dark poetry powerful and with a layer of mystery 10++
No words uttered but still he feels her kiss. This poem is very deep, and full of emotion. Very well put. Tango.
your poem brings to memory ' partings are such sweet sorrows' Shakepear's Romeo and Juliet
You capture wonderfully the awkwardness and emptiness of the lovers' farewell. Beautiful write. Fx
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
A bit vague, but it peaks your curiosity.