I Feel Like I Am Drowning Poem by Isla Bolin
I Feel Like I Am Drowning
I feel like I am drowning
The waves smash against one after the other
I try to scream for help but it comes out silent
Nobody can hear me as they to have their own waves
So why should I concern them
Make their waves slap harder
All they need to know Is that i'm playing with my beach toys
Instead of choking on the non stop water
I feel like I am drowning
While rereading, I noticed a typo I'd not noticed the first time I read line 4: 'too/also', not 'to' : ) Nonetheless aka 'however', I give 4 stars. Proofread MORE. : ) bri
I would leave a space between lines 8 & 9. And, though I had little trouble reading your poem, I'd like to see it punctuated. Welcome to PH; did I say that already? !
line 2: Did you forget to insert 'me' (not me, bri) in this line? I suspect so. line 7: 'i'm'? oops.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
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5/5/2024 6:22:15 PM # 1.0.0.1119
I HOPE all the readers believe, as I do, that 'waves' is used figuratively, to refer to troubles in one's life. PoemHunter is one of my 'beach toys'. Nice work. bri