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It's a sleepless lonely night
I can't stop thinking of you
If only you knew
How much I love you
Cold winds blowing around
I'm still awake
Out on the streets
Wandering willy-nilly
Chilled to the bone
Abandoned and alone
It's a shivering dark night
But can't freeze my feelings for you
If only you knew
How much I miss you
Up above the frosty sky
I see the sinking moon
Behind the clouds
Braving the winds
The moon resembled me
Desperate and deserted she
It's a quiet empty night
But I can't get hold of the silence
If only you knew
How much I need you
Memories keep floating back
I feel you in my heart
Entwined ten fingers
Scream in prayer
Sudden glitter of fireflies
Start making loud cries
I wonder,
If silence has ever been this loud
If night has ever been this empty
If life has ever been this illusive
Oh, my sweetheart!
I am in pain tonight
The sinking moon feels it
The freezing cold feels it
The vanishing cloud feels it
The dying star feels it
But when will you feel me?
Deependra Kumar Jha
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Tuesday, October 27, 2009 |
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Wednesday, October 28, 2009 |
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Comments about this poem (I want you to feel me
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Deependra Kumar Jha
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Robyn Selters (4/3/2010 4:21:00 AM)
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pensive, contemplative...and then the burst of fullness bringing the message home... Wonderful build up and release. Well done.
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Jordan Legaspi (11/27/2009 2:38:00 AM)
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at times we wonder to our loneliness- the feeling of in-tense drama of life. and that is meant to be part of our maturity in loving.
nice poem that denotes the ongingness of love and its contrast as the letting go inorder to fill the love.
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Neha Aradhye (11/2/2009 6:36:00 AM)
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that is a beautiful one........
keep it up! ! !
:)
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Lady Grace (10/30/2009 8:57:00 PM)
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this is beautiful dear..ilike the way you create this piece..
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Alf Hutchison (10/30/2009 3:09:00 PM)
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Your lonliness is tangable...a great write 10.. regards Alf
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Emma Adamyan (10/29/2009 2:53:00 PM)
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after reading this, even a stone can feel ur sadness. words have their effect on a reader
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C. P. Sharma (10/29/2009 6:42:00 AM)
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Intense feelings very well penned.
CP
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Marieta Maglas (10/28/2009 12:17:00 PM)
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excellent meditative lyric poem, very well expressed, touching........10+++++++++++
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Nivedita Bagchi SPC UK (10/28/2009 10:35:00 AM)
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Feeling will come when the yarning will be in ‘US’ off of I or me.
Nice one
Ten+
Ms. Nivedita
UK
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