Sailing down the river named serenity
ushered by the laughter of summer wind
emerging and fading from my senses
are time defying moments captured by my mind’s eyes
fast moving screens, fading screens, still images, multiple pauses
then I stopped and saw “I” outside my body,
high on liquid love.
© Emu Getachew October 13,2009
To see 'I' outside one's own body you need a special eye for sure...that of a philosopher or more, of a sage very 'enterprising' poem Emu, i would say...thanks...another 10.
you see the 'I's on more than one the 'I' your meant to see, the'I' in me...iip
Loved the metaphor here! an intriquing peom. Loved It; D
fast moving screens, fading screens, still images, multiple pauses then I stopped and saw “I” outside my body, //////// i couldn't stand the temptation for being misundertood on score of misinterpreting the words in poem and still try to catch it on..Sudddenly I find my self out side the body as final call from HIm dading all the memroies.... very deep and emorional wordings.... i loved its essence....10 read mine innocence regained... iam disgrace......pulled from deep sleep..go back
‘…saw “I” outside my body, high on liquid love.’ Blown-up finish! Ten++++ niv Find me in my poems niv
wonderful write, as dew on glass blade by dulcet dawn, amazing, l10++, thanks for sharing
seeing the 'i' outside the body is very special...and that would end all the problems in the world...great...10
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
a sweet and hear touching poem with rich idea..well done..liked your poem..well done 10/10