I want to SCREAM silently I
FIGHT fruitlessly, failing to
move EVERY VOICE IN MY
HEAD COMMANDS ME TO
MOVE and my finger twitches
MY CONSCIOUS IS TRAPPED in
a body that wont respond.
Don't like this one. I does nothing for me. I would scrap it. But that's just me. Someone else may love it.
1. Very bad. The whole CAPITALIZED PSEUDOSHOUTING bit should not be used by anyone over the age of fourteen. If you look past that (and it is nearly impossible to) , you are merely telling us about our problem. Show us, with original details.
A very nice description of introversion/social anxiety. I think a lot of people can relate!
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
This breaks my heart. It is so vivid the pain jumps off the page. One senses the pain and/or anger even more with the capitols, picturing you pounding with frustration on the keys..It deserves a 10 for emotion alone...The numbers given you are way off the mark..Hang in there now. Marci.M.