lightly softly
touch inspire
open silent
moist admire
pushing pulling
hold require
urgent pressing
gasp perspire
cheeks, lips
(thinking slips)
wrists, hips,
(heart skips)
finger tips
(loving quips)
saliva drips
(time, slips...
Your use of images in here is remarkable leading the reader to feel grapically what you have written from the scent to the liquid to the sound....excellent.! ! ! ! Marci.M.
1. Every cliche in the book. (I particularly (dis) like 'heart skips'. What does it even mean?) Generic, trite, and just bad. As an added plus: forced rhyme!
Something about this reminds me of an eecummings poem, but I don't remember which one. Something about the way the words swing. Something about how I can feel the words before I can think them. nice.
You use of a very few words to describe a situation is amazing.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
Yes, John, I DO like it. Sensual and sensuous. Delicious. Warm regards, Gina.