Valsa George


Self Immolation - Poem by Valsa George

The pale faced young damsel
By evening turned into a blushing bride
Her cheeks made red with rouge
And her lips glossed in cherry red
But the makeup artist, before
Seeing the magic of his deft touch
By some sudden mental derailment
In a bid at self immolation,
Set fire to himself
Badly burned by the inferno
He plunged into the waters below

One more attempt at suicide?
Or a frantic attempt to save himself?

Yet another question remains
‘Can flames turn him to ashes? ’
Or water drown his resilience?


Comments about Self Immolation by Valsa George

  • Gold Star - 32,720 Points Akhtar Jawad (3/8/2015 4:26:00 AM)

    A wonderful poetic imagination...................10 (Report) Reply

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  • Gold Star - 16,759 Points Deepak Kumar Pattanayak (2/1/2015 10:39:00 AM)

    This poem is about sunset whether I am guessing it right or not still I am sure it is about the sun and its sunset.....VALSA....great imagery and the best composition I have ever read......10 (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 0 Points Ambrosia A (11/27/2013 10:54:00 PM)

    Great write, imagination. Many says sunset is very depressing, but I feel when you are feeling low, you it is depressing and when are in joyous mood, you feel the same sunset as the end of misery and hope for fresh start, sunrise very soon after. So its looking at the half filled glass! (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 8,357 Points Tirupathi Chandrupatla (11/24/2013 11:25:00 AM)

    This is poem written with great imagination. Nature's make up artist applying all colorful touches plunges into waters below. What could be the cause of sudden mental derailment? Or is it sudden excitement of his achievement? Beautiful choice of words and great expression. I thank you for patiently explaining poem in detail. All my vagueness in understanding have been cleared. (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 1,738 Points Dinesh Nair (11/23/2013 11:15:00 AM)

    The poet has both the licenses - to use his/her language and to interpret the theme as he/she has really intended.
    A poem explained with regard to its actual theme is not a fine write and you need not explain much. The readers` difficulty is a phase of joy for a bite of this nut is a test of the teeth.
    I would like to think that the Sun gets totally immolated by noon and this slow phase getting terminated by sunset alone is an ordeal for him.
    What is amazing is the poet Valsa George can look into the face of the Sun right from the morning and in the radiant inferno she sees the shades of explicit beauty of a man on fire. A fine poem that sounds strange still. (Report) Reply

  • Freshman - 558 Points Tribhawan Kaul (11/23/2013 1:29:00 AM)

    Thanks dear poet friend Valsa.. Though each poet reads a poem and forms his/her own opinion and a poem is always open to many interpretations, I thank you coming out with the interpretation which you intended to have while giving birth to this poem.. Yes, the poem becomes more enjoyable to read when read in the context of yours imagery. Excellent../TK (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 27,979 Points Valsa George (11/22/2013 11:20:00 PM)

    Bri,
    With everyone's imagination running riot, I feel that I must add some notes to my poem. I have been deliberately trying to be a little obscure, rather intriguing to see if any one could guess what the poet intended! But reading the comments of my friends and also the comments of my good friend Bri and his further comments on other's comments, I have realized that unless I give a hint, nobody will be able to surmise what I intended!

    The poem is about sunset !

    The blushing bride is the evening sky

    The make up artist is the setting sun

    Self immolation is by the sun...(just before his plunge into the sea, he burns in flames of crimson colour!)

    A Poem is an open ended entity... any interpretation is welcome according to each one's imagination! Thanks to all my friends especially to Bri to have given me a chance to be highly humoured! ! (Ha...! Ha..) (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 10,630 Points Bri Edwards (11/22/2013 1:54:00 PM)

    valsa, you fooled me (easily done) with the opening lines, as i could not see the damsel 'doing the dirty deed' (in this case suicide) . okay....the artist. a little drama here; a newspaper account? i like everyday topics like this being described in a poem. (well, maybe this isn't an e day occurance?)
    at first reading i did not understand why you wrote the two lines:

    One more attempt at suicide?
    Or a frantic attempt to save himself?

    at first i thought 'a frantic attempt' was still talking about the burning. then i figured out you were referring to the water plunge. so yours is a very interesting question!
    i'm still wondering about the last two lines of the poem. perhaps we'll discuss it later, my friend. :) bri

    as for other comments, below:

    pradip's: so deep i'm have trouble with them

    tribhawan's: i think saving a 'victim' is a difficult 'call' to make; it could 'save' the victim's life (physically and emotionally) or it could damn the victim to continuing misery......when the victim might otherwise be enjoying a heaven or a reincarnation.

    kavya's: there is always a way to make a better start tomorrow................God gives us life, it should be left to Him to take it away too....... i happen to not agree with these comments. i DON'T think there is 'always a way'. certainly not a way that is always available or affordable. i don't believe in God, but if i did (i used to) i would say this: maybe God directs people to kill themselves sometimes. why not? and sometimes God might turn around and direct someone else to 'save' the 'victim'. my mother was VERY upset when she was saved from her overdose suicide attempt around age 87, but things worked out well enough with more pain medicine, depression counseling, and an 'assisted living environment; she died a natural? death at age 90.

    paul's: i like it. why is it so bad for people to die IF they can then have 'everlasting life or a new existence in another form/body on earth? ? of course i realize it gets complicated when children etc are involved/left behind.

    i have written several poems regarding my liberal views on suicide, especially in MY future (perhaps) .

    thanks for sharing, poet and readers! :) bri (Report) Reply

  • Silver Star - 3,265 Points Pradip Chattopadhyay (11/22/2013 8:56:00 AM)

    what depth they hold, Valsa, the last two lines! (Report) Reply

  • Freshman - 558 Points Tribhawan Kaul (11/22/2013 8:37:00 AM)

    Questions will always remain after a self-immolation bid or attempted suicide or ever an attempt to save a victim. A nice write. (Report) Reply

  • Bronze Star - 2,127 Points Kee Thampi (11/22/2013 8:37:00 AM)

    Recetly I found a well known Prof. committed ....
    really not good
    life turns into...
    Her cheeks made red with rouge
    And her lips glossed in cherry red
    But the makeup artist, before
    Seeing the magic of his deft touch
    By some sudden mental derailment
    In a bid at self immolation,
    Set fire to himself (Report) Reply

  • Bronze Star - 2,309 Points Kavya . (11/22/2013 3:58:00 AM)

    oh wat a write! there lies a suspense in this poem if the make up artiste had a last minute change of mind before fully dousing with flames and turning into ash..........People often get carried away and burden themselves with lot of worries, get depressed and decide to end their life...........forgetting that there is always a way to make a better start tomorrow................God gives us life, it should be left to Him to take it away too.......

    Also the start of the poem is wonderful..........had to read back again after I finished the poem reading once....that one has the talent and can do wonders by living in this beautiful earth, but somehow take wrong decisions to put an end to everything without realising ones capabilities.

    a gud write Mam

    a gud write Mam...... (Report) Reply

  • Bronze Star - 2,803 Points Paul Brookes (11/22/2013 3:11:00 AM)

    Well written if somewhat dark tale but when the body's gone all that's left is the soul and that is immortal is my belief. (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Friday, November 22, 2013

Poem Edited: Friday, November 22, 2013


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